Technology and relationships: IELTS Task 2 essay #13, band 6.0

There is a growing trend where some members of society consider that contemporary communication devices are contributing to negative effect on relationships of the society. While it can demonstarte numerous of disadvantages particularly creating break downs on human communication, personally I view the advantegious factors and I can not be agree with this statement.

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   RevisedWhile it can demonstrate numerous disadvantages, particularly creating breakdowns in human communication, I personally see the advantageous factors and I do not agree with this statement.

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Admittedly, nowadays individuals have a wide variety of technlogyes which ensure people with convinient conversations. Not only do some people think that it creates gaps in real realitionship between residents, but also has a negative impact on whole society. A primary examply is when adolosents addicted to their phones and do not have desire to communicate with others in real world. As a result, in can contribute to family's problems and peer-bullying in school. In this context, modern devices are having a significant influence on social relationships.

Despite all these arguments, personally I consider that cutting-edge technologies can provide people with more benefits. In technology century individuals can not survive without modern gadjets, thereby they are necessary in long distance comunication. To examplified with youth generation who is leaving home and goes to another country for studies and work. Perhaps the most significant benefit is imediately connection with individuals all over the world, that is an essentail for parents whose children are moved abroad, therefore technologies are a double edget sword with both positive and negative effect on people's life.

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   RevisedIn this era of technology, individuals cannot survive without modern gadgets, making them essential for long-distance communication.

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In conclusion, althought communication devices have several disadvantages overall, they demonstrate a plenty of advantages that have a positive effect on social relationships. Moreover, they have a great potential in developing our lifes.