Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #18, band 6.0
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The bar chart this answer describes
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| 1990 | 2000 | |
|---|---|---|
| Bicycle | 3 | 1 |
| Motorbike | 4 | 2 |
| Air | 1 | 4 |
| Bus | 40 | 42 |
| Rail | 35 | 37 |
| Total | 100 | 110 |
Academic Task 1184 words
The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chat gives information about the total distance travelled by passengers on 5 kinds of transport in the UK over a 10-year period from 1990 to 2000.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIt is clear that people mainly traveled by bus and rail, and interestingly, the figures for these types of transport were almost the same in both years, showing upward trends.
Corrected spelling errors and improved clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAdditionally, the distance traveled by air transport saw a slight increase, while the opposite was true for bicycles and motorbikes.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, regardless of the transport type, the passenger kilometers traveled increased over the period.
Improved clarity and corrected spelling.
Focusing on the increases, the passenger kilometers travelled on bus and rail were about 45 and 43 billion kilometrs in 2000, respectevely. In addition,there was a slight rise in the figure for air transport from about 5 billion kilometers to 7 billion kilometers over the years.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe figures for both these transport types rose to approximately just below 50 billion kilometers.
Corrected spelling and improved precision.
Lexical resource
RevisedRegarding decreases, the passenger kilometers traveled by bicycle and motorbike started at an average of 7 billion kilometers, followed by a negligible decrease to roughly 6 billion kilometers.
Corrected spelling and improved sentence structure.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay presents information in a logical sequence but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different points.
- Include linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIt is clear that people mainly traveled by bus and rail, and interestingly, the figures for these types of transport were almost the same in both years, showing upward trends.
Corrected spelling errors and improved clarity.
RevisedAdditionally, the distance traveled by air transport saw a slight increase, while the opposite was true for bicycles and motorbikes.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
RevisedOverall, regardless of the transport type, the passenger kilometers traveled increased over the period.
Improved clarity and corrected spelling.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures but includes several errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIt is clear that people mainly traveled by bus and rail, and interestingly, the figures for these types of transport were almost the same in both years, showing upward trends.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved clarity.
RevisedThe figures for both these transport types rose to approximately just below 50 billion kilometers.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved precision.
RevisedRegarding decreases, the passenger kilometers traveled by bicycle and motorbike started at an average of 7 billion kilometers, followed by a negligible decrease to roughly 6 billion kilometers.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary but includes some spelling errors and lacks variety.
Sentence revisions 4
RevisedIt is clear that people mainly traveled by bus and rail, and interestingly, the figures for these types of transport were almost the same in both years, showing upward trends.
Corrected spelling errors and improved word choice.
RevisedThe figures for both these transport types rose to approximately just below 50 billion kilometers.
Corrected spelling and improved precision.
RevisedRegarding decreases, the passenger kilometers traveled by bicycle and motorbike started at an average of 7 billion kilometers, followed by a negligible decrease to roughly 6 billion kilometers.
Corrected spelling and improved sentence structure.
RevisedOverall, regardless of the transport type, the passenger kilometers traveled increased over the period.
Corrected spelling and improved clarity.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information, but lacks detail in some areas.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific data from the chart.
- Include more comparisons between transport types.
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