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Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #12, band 6.0

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191 words. Marked by Axiom on 3 February 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The bar chart this answer describes

Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)1990, 2000 for Bicycle, Motorbike, Air, Bus, Rail, Total, in distance travelled, units not stated. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0255075100125BicycleMotorbikeAirBusRailTotal
Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)1990, 2000 for Bicycle, Motorbike, Air, Bus, Rail, Total, in distance travelled, units not stated. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0255075100125BicycleMotorbikeAirBusRailTotal
Values in distance travelled, units not stated. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart) (distance travelled, units not stated)
19902000
Bicycle31
Motorbike42
Air14
Bus4042
Rail3537
Total100110

Academic Task 1191 words

The chart below show the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000

The graph exhibits information about the travel distance of British passengers on five modes of transportation in 1990 and 2000. Distance is measured in billion kilometers.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, the total distance traveled by passengers increased from 1990 to 2000.

    Clarified the comparison between the years.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedWhile buses and trains accounted for the highest travel distances, bicycles had the lowest.

    Simplified and clarified the comparison.

  3. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedAdditionally, bicycles and motorbikes were more popular in 1990 than in 2000.

    Clarified the comparison between the two periods.

Firstly, focusing on the bigger numbers, with almost 48 km, buses were the most favored transport in 1990, which was slightly higher than trains with 47 km. The total amount of distance covered by passengers in 1990 was approximately 110 km, making it slightly lower than in 2000, with around 115 km.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedIn 2000, the distance for both modes increased slightly, reaching 49 billion kilometers.

    Clarified meaning and corrected measurement unit.

By contrast, the kilometers covered by planes and bicycles were the lowest in 1990 with around 6 km and 8 km, respectively. , which in 1990 was nearly 10 km as opposed to 9 km in 2000.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedWhile the distance traveled by bicycle decreased in 2000, that by plane increased to 9 billion kilometers.

    Corrected tense and clarified meaning.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedLastly, motorbike usage decreased from 10 billion kilometers in 1990 to 9 billion kilometers in 2000.

    Corrected capitalization and provided specific data.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order, but some comparisons could be clearer. Transitions between ideas are present but could be improved for better flow.

Suggestions

  • Use clearer transitions between ideas.
  • Ensure all comparisons are explicitly stated.
  • Clarify the relationship between data points.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, the total distance traveled by passengers increased from 1990 to 2000.

    Clarified the comparison between the years.

  • RevisedWhile buses and trains accounted for the highest travel distances, bicycles had the lowest.

    Simplified and clarified the comparison.

  • RevisedAdditionally, bicycles and motorbikes were more popular in 1990 than in 2000.

    Clarified the comparison between the two periods.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors in tense usage and sentence structure.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedWhile the distance traveled by bicycle decreased in 2000, that by plane increased to 9 billion kilometers.

    Corrected tense and clarified meaning.

  • RevisedLastly, motorbike usage decreased from 10 billion kilometers in 1990 to 9 billion kilometers in 2000.

    Corrected capitalization and provided specific data.

  • RevisedIn 2000, the distance for both modes increased slightly, reaching 49 billion kilometers.

    Clarified meaning and corrected measurement unit.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are imprecise or awkward. There is repetition of certain terms.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe graph illustrates the travel distances of passengers in the UK.

    Used a more precise verb and removed unnecessary words.

  • RevisedThe total distance covered by passengers in 1990 was approximately 110 billion kilometers.

    Clarified the measurement unit.

  • Revisedmotorbike usage decreased

    Simplified and clarified the expression.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and describes the main trends and comparisons, but some details are inaccurately reported.

Suggestions

  • Ensure all data points are accurately represented.
  • Include specific figures where necessary.

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