Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #26, band 6.0
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171 words. Marked by Axiom on 12 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The bar chart this answer describes
Show the data
| 1990 | 2000 | |
|---|---|---|
| Bicycle | 3 | 1 |
| Motorbike | 4 | 2 |
| Air | 1 | 4 |
| Bus | 40 | 42 |
| Rail | 35 | 37 |
| Total | 100 | 110 |
Academic Task 1171 words
The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000
The bar chart illustrates the total distance which the passengers travelled on different types of transport (bicycle, bike, Ari, bus, rail) in the UK from 1990 to 2000.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, the given chart shows raising trends throughout the whole timeframe, albeit to varying degrees.
The sentence is slightly unclear and contains a typo (hole should be whole). The revised sentence is more clear and correct.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedNotably, the bus transport maintained its leading position during the period with 40 billion kilometers in 1990 and 45 in 2000.
The sentence can be made more concise and clear. The revised sentence conveys the same information in a more direct way.
But this was not sustained. It decreased at a low point in 2000 with (11). As the same of this, bike transport declined a bit small from 18 to 16 billions. At the end of the timeframe it exhibited increase. The total usage of transports illu shows that every types of transport dominated in 2000.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe distance traveled by bicycles increased at the beginning of the period, reaching 17 billion kilometers in 1990.
The original sentence is not clear and does not use accurate terminology. The revised sentence is more precise and uses more appropriate language.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe usage of air transport started at a low point of about 10 billion kilometers in 1990.
The term 'Ari' is not correct and the sentence does not provide enough information. The revised sentence is more accurate and provides more detail.
Lexical resource
RevisedRail transport followed a lower trajectory than the bus, showing less of an increase over the whole period.
The term 'flo' is not part of standard English and the sentence is not clear. The revised sentence is more accurate and uses standard English.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe bar chart illustrates the total distance that passengers traveled on different types of transport (bicycle, bus, bus, rail) in the UK from 1990 to 2000.
The sentence is clear and provides the necessary information about the chart. However, there is a typo in the sentence (Ari should be Air) and one of the transport types is repeated (bus).
RevisedOverall, the given chart shows raising trends throughout the whole timeframe, albeit to varying degrees.
The sentence is slightly unclear and contains a typo (hole should be whole). The revised sentence is more clear and correct.
RevisedNotably, the bus transport maintained its leading position during the period with 40 billion kilometers in 1990 and 45 in 2000.
The sentence can be made more concise and clear. The revised sentence conveys the same information in a more direct way.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there is some evidence of control of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors and some of the sentences are not clear. The use of punctuation is also not always accurate.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe bar chart illustrates the total distance that passengers traveled on different types of transport (bicycle, bus, bus, rail) in the UK from 1990 to 2000.
The sentence is not grammatically correct and the use of 'which' is not appropriate in this context. The revised sentence is grammatically correct and more formal.
RevisedOverall, the given chart shows raising trends throughout the whole timeframe, albeit to varying degrees.
The sentence is not grammatically correct and the use of 'hole' is not appropriate. The revised sentence is grammatically correct and uses more formal language.
RevisedThe distance traveled by bicycles increased at the beginning of the period, reaching 17 billion kilometers in 1990.
The sentence is not grammatically correct and the meaning is not clear. The revised sentence is grammatically correct and provides a clear explanation.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an awareness of collocation. However, there are some inaccuracies and the use of more varied and precise vocabulary could improve the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe distance traveled by bicycles increased at the beginning of the period, reaching 17 billion kilometers in 1990.
The original sentence is not clear and does not use accurate terminology. The revised sentence is more precise and uses more appropriate language.
RevisedThe usage of air transport started at a low point of about 10 billion kilometers in 1990.
The term 'Ari' is not correct and the sentence does not provide enough information. The revised sentence is more accurate and provides more detail.
RevisedRail transport followed a lower trajectory than the bus, showing less of an increase over the whole period.
The term 'flo' is not part of standard English and the sentence is not clear. The revised sentence is more accurate and uses standard English.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and provides an overview of the main trends. However, the essay contains several inaccuracies and some of the information is not clearly presented. The use of specific data and examples could be improved.
Suggestions
- Ensure that all the information presented is accurate and that the data is clearly and correctly reported.
- Include specific data and examples to support your main points.
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