Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #20, band 6.0
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146 words. Marked by Axiom on 10 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The bar chart this answer describes
Show the data
| 1990 | 2000 | |
|---|---|---|
| Bicycle | 3 | 1 |
| Motorbike | 4 | 2 |
| Air | 1 | 4 |
| Bus | 40 | 42 |
| Rail | 35 | 37 |
| Total | 100 | 110 |
Academic Task 1146 words
The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000
The bar chart highlights information about the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK from 1990 to 2000.
Overall, the total distance increased over the period.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe bus and train services accounted for the highest proportion of travel in both years, whereas air travel followed a downward trend.
The specific terms 'bus' and 'train' should be used consistently. 'Ari' is not a recognized term and should be replaced with 'air'.
Bus travel increased from 40 billion passenger kilometers in 1990 to about 43 billion in 2000. Similarly, rail travel grew slightly from about 37 billion to passenger kilometers.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 1990, the total distance travelled by passengers was 100 billion kilometers. This figure rose to around 110 billion kilometers in 200.
The unit of measurement (billion kilometers) should be included in both sentences for clarity.
Similarly with bike showed an increase in 1990 about 12 billion passenger kilometers, however, this trend was sustained.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe distance travelled by bicycles increased by around 10 billion kilometers, but this was a short-lived increase.
The revised sentence provides a clearer explanation of the data.
Lexical resource
RevisedAir travel was the lowest type of transport, using only 2 billion kilometers.
The phrase 'most lowest' is not grammatically correct. It should be 'the lowest'.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe bus and train services accounted for the highest proportion of travel in both years, whereas air travel followed a downward trend.
The specific terms 'bus' and 'train' should be used consistently. 'Ari' is not a recognized term and should be replaced with 'air'.
RevisedIn 1990, the total distance travelled by passengers was 100 billion kilometers. This figure rose to around 110 billion kilometers in 200.
The unit of measurement (billion kilometers) should be included in both sentences for clarity.
RevisedThe distance travelled by bicycles increased by around 10 billion kilometers, but this was a short-lived increase.
The revised sentence provides a clearer explanation of the data.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few grammatical errors and some sentences could be structured more effectively.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few inaccuracies and some of the language is a bit awkward.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe bus and train services accounted for the highest proportion of travel in both years, whereas air travel followed a downward trend.
The term 'proportion' is more commonly used in relation to parts of a whole, while 'volume' would be more appropriate for your context.
RevisedIn 1990, the total distance travelled by passengers was 100 billion kilometers. This distance increased to around 110 billion kilometers in 200.
The term 'distance' is more appropriate here as you are referring to a specific length, not a change in proportion.
RevisedAir travel was the lowest type of transport, using only 2 billion kilometers.
The phrase 'most lowest' is not grammatically correct. It should be 'the lowest'.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay provides a clear overview of the main trends, differences, or similarities, and the information is accurately and relevantly selected and effectively supported.
Suggestions
- Make sure to accurately interpret the data and use appropriate vocabulary to describe it.
- Ensure that you fully address all parts of the task and that your response is fully developed.
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