Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #21, band 7.5
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236 words. Marked by Axiom on 10 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The bar chart this answer describes
Show the data
| 1990 | 2000 | |
|---|---|---|
| Bicycle | 3 | 1 |
| Motorbike | 4 | 2 |
| Air | 1 | 4 |
| Bus | 40 | 42 |
| Rail | 35 | 37 |
| Total | 100 | 110 |
Academic Task 1236 words
The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000
Lexical resource
RevisedThe bar chart compares five different types of transportations according to the distances passengers traveled in the UK from 1990 to 2000, measured in billion kilometers.
The revision corrects the plural form of 'transportation' and provides a more natural-sounding phrase.
Of particular note is Bicycle, Bike, and Ari which were the least favored transportation across the UK population.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, the graph indicates that Ari, Bus, Rail and the total amount followed rising trends to varying degrees, while Bicycle and Bike showed a declining trend.
The revision simplifies the sentence and makes it more precise.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedBoth the bus and the rail showed upward trajectories, with the former growing from about 40 billion kilometers in 1990 to 45 billion after a decade, while the latter increased from 38 billion to 40 billion in 2000.
The revision makes the sentence more concise and improves the flow of information.
Interestingly, despite seeing a significant increase throughout the timeline, Ari still remained the least popular transport, rising from an initial 2 billion to nearly 5 billion kilometers at the turn of the century.
Lexical resource
RevisedIn contrast, bicycles and bikes were outliers as both experienced a decline.
The revision provides a more natural and concise way to express the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedBoth bicycles and bikes, which started at around 5 billion kilometers in the initial year, saw a nearly equal decline of 1 billion kilometers after a decade.
The revision provides a more natural and concise way to express the idea.
Notably, the most pronounced growth in the whole chart can be seen in the total amount.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe total distance traveled reached a peak of around 110 billion kilometers in 1990.
The revision clarifies the meaning and provides a more natural-sounding phrase.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The use of cohesive devices is effective, with a good balance of conjunctions and referencing. However, there are a couple of areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to vary your linking words to avoid repetition and to show a wider range of language.
- Make sure that your concluding sentence ties in well with the rest of the essay.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedOverall, the graph indicates that Ari, Bus, Rail and the total amount followed rising trends to varying degrees, while Bicycle and Bike showed a declining trend.
The revision simplifies the sentence and makes it more precise.
RevisedBoth the bus and the rail showed upward trajectories, with the former growing from about 40 billion kilometers in 1990 to 45 billion after a decade, while the latter increased from 38 billion to 40 billion in 2000.
The revision makes the sentence more concise and improves the flow of information.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of grammatical structures with flexibility. There are a few grammatical errors and awkward phrases, but these do not impede communication.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedMeasured in billion kilometers.
The revision provides a more natural and concise way to express the unit of measurement.
RevisedThe total distance traveled reached a peak of around 110 billion kilometers in 1990.
The revision clarifies the meaning and provides a more natural-sounding phrase.
Lexical resource
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is generally used appropriately, with only minor errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe bar chart compares five different types of transportations according to the distances passengers traveled in the UK from 1990 to 2000, measured in billion kilometers.
The revision corrects the plural form of 'transportation' and provides a more natural-sounding phrase.
RevisedIn contrast, bicycles and bikes were outliers as both experienced a decline.
The revision provides a more natural and concise way to express the idea.
RevisedBoth bicycles and bikes, which started at around 5 billion kilometers in the initial year, saw a nearly equal decline of 1 billion kilometers after a decade.
The revision provides a more natural and concise way to express the idea.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The information is accurately and appropriately selected and effectively compares the data.
Suggestions
- Make sure to use the correct term "types of transport" instead of "transportations".
- Ensure that all units are consistent and correctly labeled.
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