Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #17, band 6.5
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199 words. Marked by Axiom on 29 June 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The bar chart this answer describes
Show the data
| 1990 | 2000 | |
|---|---|---|
| Bicycle | 3 | 1 |
| Motorbike | 4 | 2 |
| Air | 1 | 4 |
| Bus | 40 | 42 |
| Rail | 35 | 37 |
| Total | 100 | 110 |
Academic Task 1199 words
The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart compares five types of transports in terms of the total distance travelled by passengers in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, while the total distance traveled by passengers on air, bus, and rail transport increased, the opposite trend was observed for bicycles and motorcycles.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
Lexical resource
RevisedFurthermore, buses and rail were the most preferred modes of transport for people in the UK.
Improved word choice and precision.
Starting at about 47 billion kilometers in 1990, the total distance travelled by passengers on the Bus transport increased minimally by about 2 billion kilometers in 2000. Similarly, the figure for Rail was approximately 46 billion kilometers in 1990, before a nominal growth to nearly 50 billion kilometers.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedBoth bus and rail exhibited similar patterns.
Clarified the comparison between bus and rail.
In contrast, the use of Bicycle, Motorbike, and Air transports was relatively smaller. By 2000, the figure for bicycle and motorbike witnessed a minimal decline by around one billion kilometers, whereas the total distance travelled by passengers on Air transport increased steady, reaching around 12 billion kilometers.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe total distance traveled by passengers using these modes was about 10 billion kilometers each in 1990.
Avoided repetition and improved clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedMoreover, the total distance traveled by all transport types combined rose gradually from 110 billion to 115 billion kilometers between 1990 and 2000.
Clarified the meaning of 'total indicator'.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay presents information in a logical order, but some comparisons and contrasts are not clearly highlighted. The overall structure is clear, but there is room for improvement in linking ideas more effectively.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Highlight comparisons and contrasts more clearly.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, while the total distance traveled by passengers on air, bus, and rail transport increased, the opposite trend was observed for bicycles and motorcycles.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
RevisedBoth bus and rail exhibited similar patterns.
Clarified the comparison between bus and rail.
RevisedMoreover, the total distance traveled by all transport types combined rose gradually from 110 billion to 115 billion kilometers between 1990 and 2000.
Clarified the meaning of 'total indicator'.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, with some minor errors. Most sentences are error-free, but there is room for improvement in complex sentence structures.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, while the total distance traveled by passengers on air, bus, and rail transport increased, the opposite trend was observed for bicycles and motorcycles.
Corrected capitalization and improved sentence structure.
RevisedThe total distance traveled by passengers using these modes was about 10 billion kilometers each in 1990.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedBy 2000, the distance traveled by bicycle and motorbike decreased slightly by around one billion kilometers.
Corrected passive voice and improved clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and repetitions. More varied and precise vocabulary could enhance the essay.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedFurthermore, buses and rail were the most preferred modes of transport for people in the UK.
Improved word choice and precision.
RevisedThe total distance traveled by passengers using these modes was about 10 billion kilometers each in 1990.
Avoided repetition and improved clarity.
RevisedBy 2000, the distance traveled by bicycle and motorbike decreased slightly by around one billion kilometers.
Improved word choice and sentence structure.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information from the chart. However, some details are inaccurately reported, and comparisons could be more explicit.
Suggestions
- Ensure all data is accurately reported.
- Make comparisons more explicit.
- Include more specific data points.
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