Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #22, band 4.5
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138 words. Marked by Axiom on 12 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The bar chart this answer describes
Show the data
| 1990 | 2000 | |
|---|---|---|
| Bicycle | 3 | 1 |
| Motorbike | 4 | 2 |
| Air | 1 | 4 |
| Bus | 40 | 42 |
| Rail | 35 | 37 |
| Total | 100 | 110 |
Academic Task 1138 words
The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
The bar chart highlights the information of how long distance travelled by people on five different types of transport — bicycle, bike, air, bus and rail — in the United Kingdom in a decade period between 1990 and 2000. Units are represented in billions.
Overall, what can be seen in the graph is that almost all transportation adhered to rising trends, albeit to varying degrees, with bus being the most preferable transport, while the use of bike and bicycle exhibited downward trajectory throughout the timeframe.
In contrast, the use of bike and bicycle...
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 1990, passengers travelled roughly 30 billion kilometres, which increased to 32 billion in 2000.
The phrase 'after which increased to mere 32 billion' is unclear. It's better to be more explicit about the time frame.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe rail was the second most popular mode of transport, accounting for 27 billion kilometres at the beginning and experiencing a slight rise to 28 billion kilometres by the end of the period.
The original sentence is confusing and not very coherent. The revision provides the same information in a clearer and more concise way.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 4.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the information is clearly and coherently presented. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedIn 1990, passengers travelled roughly 30 billion kilometres, which increased to 32 billion in 2000.
The phrase 'after which increased to mere 32 billion' is unclear. It's better to be more explicit about the time frame.
RevisedThe rail was the second most popular mode of transport, accounting for 27 billion kilometres at the beginning and experiencing a slight rise to 28 billion kilometres by the end of the period.
The original sentence is confusing and not very coherent. The revision provides the same information in a clearer and more concise way.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are grammatically correct. However, there are a few errors that affect the overall clarity.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedIn 1990, passengers travelled roughly 30 billion kilometres, which increased to just 32 billion.
The phrase 'after which increased to mere 32 billion' is grammatically incorrect.
RevisedThe rail was the second most popular mode of transport, accounting for 27 billion kilometres at the beginning and experiencing a slight rise to 28 billion kilometres by the end of the period.
The phrase 'Regarding the rail being the second famous transport with accounting 27 billion kilometres' is grammatically incorrect.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedIn 1990, passengers travelled approximately 30 billion kilometres, which increased to just 32 billion.
The phrase 'after which increased to mere 32 billion' is awkward and could be phrased more naturally.
RevisedThe rail was the second most popular mode of transport, accounting for 27 billion kilometres at the beginning and experiencing a slight increase of 1 billion kilometres by the end of the period.
The phrase 'Regarding the rail being the second famous transport' is awkward and could be phrased more naturally.
Task achievement
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more effective use of data from the chart.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details about the data presented in the chart.
- Make more effective use of the data from the chart to support your statements.
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