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Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #14, band 5.0

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158 words. Marked by Axiom on 21 April 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The bar chart this answer describes

Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)1990, 2000 for Bicycle, Motorbike, Air, Bus, Rail, Total, in distance travelled, units not stated. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0255075100125BicycleMotorbikeAirBusRailTotal
Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)1990, 2000 for Bicycle, Motorbike, Air, Bus, Rail, Total, in distance travelled, units not stated. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0255075100125BicycleMotorbikeAirBusRailTotal
Values in distance travelled, units not stated. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
Show the data
Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart) (distance travelled, units not stated)
19902000
Bicycle31
Motorbike42
Air14
Bus4042
Rail3537
Total100110

Academic Task 1158 words

The chart shows the total distance travelled by passangers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

The bar chart shows changes in the amount of total distance travelled by passangers on five diifferent vehicles in one particular country from 1990 to 2000. Additionally, bus and rail stood out among other transports.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, the usage of buses, air, and rail increased slowly, while the opposite trend was observed for the remaining vehicles.

    Clarified the sentence by using linking words and correcting grammatical errors.

After ten years, This difference became a bit pronounced, when the figure for the former rose to 35 bilion kilometers and that for rail increased to about 30 bilion kilometers.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn 1990, buses experienced about 30 billion kilometers, slightly more than rail at 28 billion kilometers.

    Simplified the sentence structure for better coherence.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedHowever, air travel saw a slight increase, growing from 6 billion kilometers to 10 billion kilometers.

    Corrected spelling errors and improved word choice.

in 1990, starting at 5 bilion kilometers, the amount of total distance by bicycle decreased slowly to 3 bilion kilometers. However, bike witnessed smaller figure.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn contrast, bicycles and bikes displayed a reverse pattern.

    Improved sentence clarity and coherence.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay has basic cohesion but lacks clear organization and logical progression.

Suggestions

  • Use linking words to connect ideas more clearly.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
  • Summarize key points effectively.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, the usage of buses, air, and rail increased slowly, while the opposite trend was observed for the remaining vehicles.

    Clarified the sentence by using linking words and correcting grammatical errors.

  • RevisedIn 1990, buses experienced about 30 billion kilometers, slightly more than rail at 28 billion kilometers.

    Simplified the sentence structure for better coherence.

  • RevisedIn contrast, bicycles and bikes displayed a reverse pattern.

    Improved sentence clarity and coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors and lacks complex structures.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, the usage of buses, air, and rail increased slowly, whereas the opposite was true for the remaining vehicles.

    Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

  • RevisedBuses experienced about 30 billion kilometers, slightly more than rail at 28 billion kilometers.

    Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

  • RevisedIn contrast, bicycles and bikes displayed a reverse pattern.

    Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

Lexical resource

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some errors.

Sentence revisions 4

  • RevisedOverall, the usage of buses, air, and rail increased slowly, whereas the opposite was true for the remaining vehicles.

    Corrected spelling errors and improved word choice.

  • RevisedBuses experienced about 30 billion kilometers, slightly more than rail at 28 billion kilometers.

    Corrected spelling errors and improved word choice.

  • RevisedHowever, air travel saw a slight increase, growing from 6 billion kilometers to 10 billion kilometers.

    Corrected spelling errors and improved word choice.

  • RevisedIn contrast, bicycles and bikes displayed a reverse pattern.

    Improved vocabulary choice for clarity.

Task achievement

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks detail and accuracy in data representation.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data from the chart.
  • Ensure all types of transport are covered.
  • Provide a clearer overview of trends.

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