Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #19, band 5.0
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The bar chart this answer describes
Show the data
| 1990 | 2000 | |
|---|---|---|
| Bicycle | 3 | 1 |
| Motorbike | 4 | 2 |
| Air | 1 | 4 |
| Bus | 40 | 42 |
| Rail | 35 | 37 |
| Total | 100 | 110 |
Academic Task 1229 words
The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe bar chart compares the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport—bicycle, motorbike, air, bus, and rail—in the UK between 1990 and 2000. Overall, the total distance travelled by all transport types increased to varying degrees, except for bicycle and motorbike, which experienced a slight decline.
Improved sentence structure and punctuation for clarity and cohesion.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedNotably, the total distance travelled by passengers on all transport types combined was the highest in both years, whereas travel by bicycle accounted for the lowest distance.
Clarified the comparison and improved sentence flow.
The total distance travelled by passengers on air ,on the other hand,was the lowest transport type in the first year that experienced from a mere 5 billions to 7 billions in 2000.
Lexical resource
RevisedRegarding the trends that experienced an increase, the total distance travelled by passengers overall rose slightly from about 115 billion kilometers in 1990 to 120 billion in 2000, remaining the largest contributor throughout the period.
Improved word choice and corrected grammatical errors.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThere was a marginal growth in the total distance travelled by passengers on bus and rail, increasing from about 45 billion and 42 billion initially to 49 billion and 48 billion respectively.
Corrected grammar and improved sentence structure.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedTurning to the downward trends, the total distance travelled by passengers on bicycle and motorbike saw a slight decrease, from 5 and 6 billion kilometers in 1990 to 4 and 5 billion kilometers in 2000, making them the lowest contributors overall.
Combined fragmented sentences and clarified the information.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay presents information in a generally logical order, with an overview and then details for each transport type. However, there are issues with paragraphing, linking words, and sentence structure, which sometimes make the text difficult to follow. Some comparisons are made, but transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas clearly.
- Separate the overview from the details for better paragraphing.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe bar chart compares the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport—bicycle, motorbike, air, bus, and rail—in the UK between 1990 and 2000. Overall, the total distance travelled by all transport types increased to varying degrees, except for bicycle and motorbike, which experienced a slight decline.
Improved sentence structure and punctuation for clarity and cohesion.
RevisedNotably, the total distance travelled by passengers on all transport types combined was the highest in both years, whereas travel by bicycle accounted for the lowest distance.
Clarified the comparison and improved sentence flow.
RevisedTurning to the downward trends, the total distance travelled by passengers on bicycle and motorbike saw a slight decrease, from 5 and 6 billion kilometers in 1990 to 4 and 5 billion kilometers in 2000, making them the lowest contributors overall.
Combined fragmented sentences and clarified the information.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay attempts some complex sentences but contains frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement ('compare' instead of 'compares'), incorrect pluralization ('billions'), and missing articles. These errors sometimes hinder understanding.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe bar chart compares the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport
Corrected subject-verb agreement.
Revisedfrom about 115 billion in 1990 to 120 billion in 2000
Corrected pluralization of 'billion'.
RevisedThere was a marginal growth in the total distance travelled by passengers on bus and rail, increasing from about 45 billion and 42 billion initially to 49 billion and 48 billion respectively.
Corrected grammar and improved sentence structure.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and collocation (e.g., 'bicyce', 'whic', 'entire general distance'). Some repetition and awkward phrasing reduce clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe bar chart compares the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport—bicycle, motorbike, air, bus, and rail—in the UK between 1990 and 2000.
Corrected spelling and improved word choice.
RevisedNotably, the total distance travelled by all transport types combined was the highest in both years, while travel by bicycle was the lowest.
Replaced awkward phrasing with more natural expressions.
RevisedRegarding the trends that experienced an increase, the total distance travelled by passengers overall rose slightly from about 115 billion kilometers in 1990 to 120 billion in 2000, remaining the largest contributor throughout the period.
Improved word choice and corrected grammatical errors.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the main features of the chart and makes some relevant comparisons. However, there are inaccuracies (e.g., 'total' is not a transport type but a sum), and some details are unclear or imprecise. The summary is present but could be more concise and accurate.
Suggestions
- Clarify that 'total' refers to the sum of all transport types, not a separate mode.
- Ensure all key features and comparisons are clearly and accurately described.
- Avoid unnecessary repetition and focus on the most significant trends.
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