Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #24, band 4.5
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141 words. Marked by Axiom on 12 October 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The bar chart this answer describes
Show the data
| 1990 | 2000 | |
|---|---|---|
| Bicycle | 3 | 1 |
| Motorbike | 4 | 2 |
| Air | 1 | 4 |
| Bus | 40 | 42 |
| Rail | 35 | 37 |
| Total | 100 | 110 |
Academic Task 1141 words
The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000
The bar graph compares the total distance of passengers' travel on five different types of transport in the UK from 1990 to 2000, with units measured in billion kilometers.
Overall, what stands out from the graph is that the distance travel by Air, Bus and Rail adhered to rising trends, albeit to varying degrees, with the figure of travel by bus experiencing the most pronounced growth while the reverse was true for Bicycle and Bike.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedDespite these trends, the total amount of distance travelled by the five types of transport showed an increase.
The revision provides a clearer and more coherent sentence structure.
People ran just 1 bln kms which is not far from the distance of travel by Bus.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedRegarding the bus, there was a marginal increase, accounting for a mere rise of 2 billion kilometers.
The revision improves the sentence structure and coherence.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe trend for rail journeys was similar.
The revision provides a clearer and more concise statement.
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Lexical resource
RevisedWith regard to bicycle transportation...
The revision provides a more formal and academic language.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 4.0/ 9
The introduction is clear and the essay is logically organized with clear connections between ideas. However, there is a lack of summarizing statement in the conclusion.
Suggestions
- Add a summarizing statement in the conclusion.
- Use more varied cohesive devices.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedDespite these trends, the total amount of distance travelled by the five types of transport showed an increase.
The revision provides a clearer and more coherent sentence structure.
RevisedRegarding the bus, there was a marginal increase, accounting for a mere rise of 2 billion kilometers.
The revision improves the sentence structure and coherence.
RevisedThe trend for rail journeys was similar.
The revision provides a clearer and more concise statement.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free of grammatical errors. However, there are some grammatical errors that need to be addressed.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe figure for travel by bus experienced the most pronounced growth, while the opposite was true for bicycle and bike.
The revision corrects the grammatical error and provides a more accurate statement.
RevisedRegarding bicycle...
The revision provides a more accurate and formal language.
RevisedPeople travelled only 1 billion kilometres.
The revision corrects the grammatical error and provides a more accurate statement.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic usage. However, there is a need for more varied language and precision in word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe graph clearly indicates that the distances travelled by air, bus, and rail transportation followed rising trends.
The revision provides a more precise and formal language.
RevisedWith regard to bicycle transportation...
The revision provides a more formal and academic language.
RevisedPeople travelled only 1 billion kilometres.
The revision provides a more precise and formal language.
Task achievement
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay provides a clear overview and specific details about the total distance travelled by passengers on different types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000. The essay meets the task requirements, but it could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis and comparison of the data.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis and comparison of the data.
- Include specific data and examples to support your main points.
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