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Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #15, band 5.5

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247 words. Marked by Axiom on 8 June 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The bar chart this answer describes

Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)1990, 2000 for Bicycle, Motorbike, Air, Bus, Rail, Total, in distance travelled, units not stated. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0255075100125BicycleMotorbikeAirBusRailTotal
Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)1990, 2000 for Bicycle, Motorbike, Air, Bus, Rail, Total, in distance travelled, units not stated. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0255075100125BicycleMotorbikeAirBusRailTotal
Values in distance travelled, units not stated. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
Show the data
Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart) (distance travelled, units not stated)
19902000
Bicycle31
Motorbike42
Air14
Bus4042
Rail3537
Total100110

Academic Task 1247 words

The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe bar chart illustrates the total distance traveled by passengers using five types of transport in the UK for the years 1990 and 2000.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity and coherence.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe units are measured in billions of passenger kilometers.

    Corrected spelling and improved phrasing.

Bus and rail travelling showed almost the same amount of distance travelled by people in two years increasing only by 2 - 3 billions of kilometers.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, the total distance traveled increased significantly over the decade compared to individual transport types.

    Clarified the comparison for better coherence.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOther transport types, such as bicycles and bikes, were used less, each showing under 25 billion kilometers.

    Clarified which transport types are being referred to.

To begin with, total amount was the biggest in both 1990 and 2000, showing 100 billions in first year and about 112 billions of kilometers in the second year. Rail, on the other hand, was the second popular transport type showing almost the same distance in two years about 35 and 36 billions of kilometers respectively.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe bus was frequently used in both years, with distances rising from approximately 38 billion to 44 billion kilometers.

    Improved word choice and sentence structure.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedBicycles and bikes were the only transport types showing a downward trend, with similar distances in 1990 and a decline by 2000.

    Clarified and corrected the sentence for better lexical resource.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedHowever, air travel increased from approximately 3 billion to 7 billion kilometers by the final year.

    Corrected spelling and improved clarity.

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Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay has a logical structure but lacks clear progression and some sentences are not well connected.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to improve flow.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
  • Avoid repetition of ideas.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe bar chart illustrates the total distance traveled by passengers using five types of transport in the UK for the years 1990 and 2000.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity and coherence.

  • RevisedOverall, the total distance traveled increased significantly over the decade compared to individual transport types.

    Clarified the comparison for better coherence.

  • RevisedOther transport types, such as bicycles and bikes, were used less, each showing under 25 billion kilometers.

    Clarified which transport types are being referred to.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe bar chart illustrates the total distance traveled by passengers using five types of transport in the UK for the years 1990 and 2000.

    Corrected spelling and improved sentence structure.

  • RevisedOther transport types, such as bicycles and bikes, were used less, each showing under 25 billion kilometers.

    Corrected grammatical errors and clarified the sentence.

  • RevisedHowever, air travel increased from approximately 3 billion to 7 billion kilometers by the final year.

    Corrected spelling and grammatical errors.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary but with some repetition and minor errors.

Sentence revisions 4

  • RevisedThe units are measured in billions of passenger kilometers.

    Corrected spelling and improved phrasing.

  • RevisedThe bus was frequently used in both years, with distances rising from approximately 38 billion to 44 billion kilometers.

    Improved word choice and sentence structure.

  • RevisedBicycles and bikes were the only transport types showing a downward trend, with similar distances in 1990 and a decline by 2000.

    Clarified and corrected the sentence for better lexical resource.

  • RevisedHowever, air travel increased from approximately 3 billion to 7 billion kilometers by the final year.

    Corrected spelling and improved clarity.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks some details and contains inaccuracies.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data from the chart.
  • Ensure all transport types are accurately described.
  • Avoid inaccuracies in data representation.

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