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Passenger travel by transport type: IELTS Task 1 answer #7, band 6.0

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151 words. Marked by Axiom on 13 December 2024. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The bar chart this answer describes

Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)1990, 2000 for Bicycle, Motorbike, Air, Bus, Rail, Total, in distance travelled, units not stated. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0255075100125BicycleMotorbikeAirBusRailTotal
Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart)1990, 2000 for Bicycle, Motorbike, Air, Bus, Rail, Total, in distance travelled, units not stated. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0255075100125BicycleMotorbikeAirBusRailTotal
Values in distance travelled, units not stated. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
Show the data
Passenger travel by transport type (IELTS Task 1 bar chart) (distance travelled, units not stated)
19902000
Bicycle31
Motorbike42
Air14
Bus4042
Rail3537
Total100110

Academic Task 1151 words

The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates the usage of five modes of transport by passengers, measured in billion kilometers, in the UK between 1990 and 2000.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, rail and bus were the most preferred options, while air, motorbike, and bicycle were less popular.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedAdditionally, all transport modes showed an increase over the decade.

    Clarified the trend for all modes.

In 1990, Buses had the highest usage in terms of distance traveled, accounting for 45 billion kilometers whereas rail witnessed slightly lower figures.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedAdditionally, the figures for other types were less than 10 billion kilometers, indicating modest usage.

    Clarified the sentence for better understanding.

The usage of motorbikes decreased to approximately 8 billion kilometers, while bicycle and air transport were observed to the lowest proportions, once again,

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn 2000, both buses and rail reached nearly 50 billion kilometers, showing a significant increase.

    Rephrased for clarity and precision.

  2. Lexical resource

    Revisedmaking them consistently the least preferred options in both years.

    Added 'consistently' for emphasis.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information logically but lacks detailed comparisons and transitions.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to improve flow.
  • Provide more detailed comparisons.
  • Clarify trends and patterns.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, rail and bus were the most preferred options, while air, motorbike, and bicycle were less popular.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity.

  • RevisedAdditionally, all transport modes showed an increase over the decade.

    Clarified the trend for all modes.

  • RevisedIn 2000, both buses and rail reached nearly 50 billion kilometers, showing a significant increase.

    Rephrased for clarity and precision.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedIn 1990, buses had the highest distance traveled.

    Corrected capitalization error.

  • RevisedAdditionally, the figures for other types were less than 10 billion kilometers, indicating modest usage.

    Clarified the sentence for better understanding.

  • Revisedmaking them the least preferred modes of transport in both years.

    Improved noun consistency.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The vocabulary is adequate but lacks variety and precision.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe bar chart depicts the distance traveled by passengers using five different modes of transport.

    Used 'depicts' for variety and precision.

  • RevisedThe distance traveled by motorbikes decreased to about 8 billion kilometers.

    Clarified 'usage' to 'distance traveled' for precision.

  • Revisedmaking them consistently the least preferred options in both years.

    Added 'consistently' for emphasis.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The response addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and comparisons.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data points.
  • Make clearer comparisons between transport modes.
  • Highlight significant trends and changes.

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