Overseas visitors to the UK: IELTS Task 1 answer #19, band 6.0
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227 words. Marked by Axiom on 19 January 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| Holiday | Business | Visit to friends or relatives | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1989 | 6.5 | 5.5 | 3.5 |
| 1994 | 7.75 | 5 | 4.25 |
| 1999 | 9 | 7 | 5.75 |
| 2004 | 7.5 | 7 | 7 |
| 2009 | 9 | 6.5 | 6 |
Academic Task 1227 words
The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009
The line graph illustrates the proportion of overseas visitors who visited the UK for three different reasons from 1989 to 2009.
Lexical resource
RevisedOverall, each category showed an upward trend, although the extent varied over the period.
Improved precision and variety in vocabulary.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe majority of visitors came to the UK for holidays, while the least number visited for meeting friends and relatives.
Clarified the sentence for better understanding.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedNotably, the ranking of the categories remained consistent by the end of the period.
Clarified the statement about the categories' positions.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 1989, 6.5 million overseas visitors came to the UK for holidays, which was the highest figure in the graph.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis number of visitors remained stable until 1992 before significantly increasing to a peak of 9 million in 1994.
Improved grammatical structure for clarity.
Lexical resource
RevisedAfter a steady decline to 6.5 million visitors in 2004, the number increased to 9 million by the end of the period.
Improved clarity and lexical variety.
This figure gradually increased to around 8 million visitors between 2004 and 2009. By the end, this number of visitors dropped to just around 7 million.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn 1989, visitors for business purposes stood at 5 million, showing a slight decrease to just under 4.5 million in 1994.
Corrected verb form for grammatical accuracy.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedSimilarly, the number of visitors who came to meet friends or relatives experienced a steady increase, starting at approximately 3.5 million.
Corrected adjective form for grammatical accuracy.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe number gradually rose to a peak of 7 million in 2004, followed by a slight decrease to 6 million by the end of the period.
Enhanced vocabulary precision and sentence structure.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay provides a clear overview and follows a logical structure, but some details are inaccurate or unclear.
Suggestions
- Ensure accuracy in data representation.
- Use more linking words to enhance flow.
- Clarify the trends and comparisons.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe majority of visitors came to the UK for holidays, while the least number visited for meeting friends and relatives.
Clarified the sentence for better understanding.
RevisedIn 1989, 6.5 million overseas visitors came to the UK for holidays, which was the highest figure in the graph.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedNotably, the ranking of the categories remained consistent by the end of the period.
Clarified the statement about the categories' positions.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but some errors affect clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn 1989, visitors for business purposes stood at 5 million, showing a slight decrease to just under 4.5 million in 1994.
Corrected verb form for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedSimilarly, the number of visitors who came to meet friends or relatives experienced a steady increase, starting at approximately 3.5 million.
Corrected adjective form for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedThis number of visitors remained stable until 1992 before significantly increasing to a peak of 9 million in 1994.
Improved grammatical structure for clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some phrases could be more precise or varied.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, each category showed an upward trend, although the extent varied over the period.
Improved precision and variety in vocabulary.
RevisedThe number gradually rose to a peak of 7 million in 2004, followed by a slight decrease to 6 million by the end of the period.
Enhanced vocabulary precision and sentence structure.
RevisedAfter a steady decline to 6.5 million visitors in 2004, the number increased to 9 million by the end of the period.
Improved clarity and lexical variety.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task but contains inaccuracies in data representation and lacks some detailed comparisons.
Suggestions
- Ensure data accuracy and consistency with the graph.
- Include more detailed comparisons between categories.
- Highlight key trends and changes more clearly.
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