Overseas visitors to the UK: IELTS Task 1 answer #15, band 7.0
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193 words. Marked by Axiom on 13 September 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
Show the data
| Holiday | Business | Visit to friends or relatives | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1989 | 6.5 | 5.5 | 3.5 |
| 1994 | 7.75 | 5 | 4.25 |
| 1999 | 9 | 7 | 5.75 |
| 2004 | 7.5 | 7 | 7 |
| 2009 | 9 | 6.5 | 6 |
Academic Task 1193 words
The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who went to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of immigrants coming to the UK for three different purposes: business, holiday, meeting friends and relatives from 1989 to 2009. The number of people is measured in the millions.
In contrast, traveling to meet friends and relatives showed the least common reason.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, the total number of visitors increased, with holidays being the most popular purpose for visits to the UK.
Ensures the sentence starts with a subject and clarifies the comparison.
In 1989, approximately 6,5 million people visited the UK for holiday purposes, which was higher than meeting friends and business. About one decade later, the number of vacationers reached the highest point at the 9 million exactly, before falling to its initial point in 2004.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, the number surged again afterwards, ending the period at approximately 9 million visitors.
Improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.
Then they experienced an upward trend until 2007, peaking at 8 million people, before declining in 2009. what score you would score
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedStarting from a lower point of 5 million, business trips fell slightly to 4 million by 1991.
Improves sentence structure for clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedMeeting friends and relatives displayed an upward trend from 3.5 million in 1989 to 7 million in 2008, before a slight decline in 2009.
Clarifies the trend without overcomplicating the description.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay maintains a logical structure with clear comparisons and descriptions of trends. However, certain transitions and descriptions could be more precise.
Suggestions
- Introduce linking words for smoother transitions.
- Ensure each sentence flows logically to the next.
- Clarify patterns described.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the total number of visitors increased, with holidays being the most popular purpose for visits to the UK.
Ensures the sentence starts with a subject and clarifies the comparison.
RevisedHowever, the number surged again afterwards, ending the period at approximately 9 million visitors.
Improves clarity and grammatical accuracy.
RevisedMeeting friends and relatives displayed an upward trend from 3.5 million in 1989 to 7 million in 2008, before a slight decline in 2009.
Clarifies the trend without overcomplicating the description.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay contains several complex sentences and demonstrates reasonable grammatical control, but some inaccuracies are present.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn 1989, approximately 6.5 million people visited the UK for holiday purposes.
Uses a period instead of a comma for decimal numbers in English.
RevisedStarting from a lower point of 5 million, business trips fell slightly to 4 million by 1991.
Improves sentence structure for clarity.
Revisedincreasing from 3.5 million in 1989 to 7 million in 2008, followed by a decline in 2009.
Enhances grammatical precision and flow.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
Uses a range of vocabulary to describe trends and data, although some repetitions and inaccuracies occur.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe line graph illustrates the number of overseas visitors coming to the UK for business, holidays, and to meet friends and relatives.
Corrects the term 'immigrants' to 'overseas visitors' as per the task description.
RevisedYet, it rose significantly after this period.
Provides variety in expression and maintains grammatical accuracy.
Reviseddeclined slightly to 4 million in 1991.
Varies vocabulary without altering meaning.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay adequately represents the data and performs a good comparison between different categories. Some specific details could be refined.
Suggestions
- Use the correct terminology as per the task description.
- Provide more specific time markers to enhance precision.
- Ensure consistency in data comparison.
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