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Shakefield town, 1995 and now: IELTS Task 1 answer #31, band 5.0

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153 words. Marked by Axiom on 29 April 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The map this answer describes

Shakefield town, 1995 and now: what the maps show

1995

  • The central area above the main road is dominated by a Public park and a small Hotel.
  • The right-hand area above the road has Farm land in the top-right corner.
  • The coastal/marine area at the bottom left features a Fish market and Morning fish boat.

Present

  • The Public park was replaced by Holiday homes and a Car park.
  • The Farm land in the top right was replaced by a Golf Course and a Tennis Course.
  • The fishing facilities (Fish market and Morning fish boat) were replaced by Apartments and leisure Yachts in the sea.
  • The Sport area was replaced by a Restaurant, while Housing expanded.
  • The Hotel expanded in size, and the Coffee shop remained unchanged.
New by Present
Restaurant, Apartment, Holiday homes, Car park, Golf Course, Tennis Course, Yacht
Gone by Present
Sport, Fish market, Morning fish boat, Public park, Farm land

Academic Task 1153 words

The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The map illustrates the changes of the Shakefield town from 1995 until now.

Overall, While fishing disappeared, some more public spaces and facilities were constructed. Green spaces became less compared to the past.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    Revisedthe town has become more populated and more accessible to the public.

    Corrects verb tense and improves clarity.

Housing was increased in number, whereas hotel was expanded.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedSignificant changes occurred in residential areas, with new apartments built near the sea and holiday homes replacing the public park.

    This revision clarifies the location and nature of changes, improving cohesion.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedNew apartments were constructed near the upper left side of the sea, and holiday homes were built in place of the public park.

    Improves sentence structure and clarity.

  3. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedAdditionally, a car park was established to the right of the hotel.

    Improves word order and preposition use.

However, there were some changes to facilities for citizens there. Moreover, As for farm land, it was separated into golf course in the upper side and tennis course in the corner.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedFirstly, the coffee shop was moved to the right side of the map, closer to the sea.

    This revision specifies what 'coffee' refers to and improves sentence flow.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe morning fish boats were removed, and in their place, several yachts now occupy the sea area.

    This revision uses clearer linking and more precise language.

  3. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe sports buildings were converted into a restaurant, which was also slightly relocated.

    This revision uses more precise and natural vocabulary.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a generally logical order, but there are issues with cohesion and paragraphing. Some sentences are unclear or awkwardly connected, and referencing is sometimes confusing. There is a lack of clear topic sentences and linking words.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to show comparisons and contrasts.
  • Group similar changes together for better paragraphing.
  • Clarify the sequence of changes and locations.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedSignificant changes occurred in residential areas, with new apartments built near the sea and holiday homes replacing the public park.

    This revision clarifies the location and nature of changes, improving cohesion.

  • RevisedFirstly, the coffee shop was moved to the right side of the map, closer to the sea.

    This revision specifies what 'coffee' refers to and improves sentence flow.

  • RevisedThe morning fish boats were removed, and in their place, several yachts now occupy the sea area.

    This revision uses clearer linking and more precise language.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

There are frequent grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms, missing articles, and awkward sentence structures. Some sentences are incomplete or unclear.

Sentence revisions 3

  • Revisedthe town has become more populated and more accessible to the public.

    Corrects verb tense and improves clarity.

  • RevisedNew apartments were constructed near the upper left side of the sea, and holiday homes were built in place of the public park.

    Improves sentence structure and clarity.

  • RevisedAdditionally, a car park was established to the right of the hotel.

    Improves word order and preposition use.

Lexical resource

Band 5.0/ 9

The vocabulary is generally adequate but sometimes inaccurate or awkward (e.g., 'coffee' instead of 'coffee shop', 'public friendly'). There is some repetition and limited use of a range of vocabulary.

Sentence revisions 3

  • Revisedmore accessible to the public

    'Public friendly' is not natural; 'more accessible to the public' is clearer.

  • Revisedthe coffee shop was relocated to the right side of the map

    Specifying 'coffee shop' is more accurate.

  • RevisedThe sports buildings were converted into a restaurant, which was also slightly relocated.

    This revision uses more precise and natural vocabulary.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task by summarizing the main changes and making some comparisons. However, some details are unclear or missing, and there are inaccuracies in describing the changes. The overview is present but could be more precise.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific details about the changes.
  • Ensure all main features are clearly described and compared.
  • Avoid vague or inaccurate statements.

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