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Shakefield town, 1995 and now: IELTS Task 1 answer #30, band 7.0

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233 words. Marked by Axiom on 31 March 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The map this answer describes

Shakefield town, 1995 and now: what the maps show

1995

  • The central area above the main road is dominated by a Public park and a small Hotel.
  • The right-hand area above the road has Farm land in the top-right corner.
  • The coastal/marine area at the bottom left features a Fish market and Morning fish boat.

Present

  • The Public park was replaced by Holiday homes and a Car park.
  • The Farm land in the top right was replaced by a Golf Course and a Tennis Course.
  • The fishing facilities (Fish market and Morning fish boat) were replaced by Apartments and leisure Yachts in the sea.
  • The Sport area was replaced by a Restaurant, while Housing expanded.
  • The Hotel expanded in size, and the Coffee shop remained unchanged.
New by Present
Restaurant, Apartment, Holiday homes, Car park, Golf Course, Tennis Course, Yacht
Gone by Present
Sport, Fish market, Morning fish boat, Public park, Farm land

Academic Task 1233 words

The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995 until now.

The map illustrates the evolution of Shakefield town since 1995. Overall, the elimination of agricultural land, green space, sports venues, and a seafood market has created space for the introduction of a golf course, tennis course, vacation rentals, car park, eateries, cottages, and yachts during the period. Additionally, the remaining areas - residential blocks, hotel, and coffee shop - have stayed largely untouched, with only minor changes.

In 1995, the area used to boast a , with farmland on the top-right boundary. To the bottom of the agricultural land was a city park neighboring a hotel, and a cafe could be spotted on the opposite side. The housing complexes and sports venues were situated on the other end of the road, with a fish market and morning fish boats located near the sea, making them largely accessible by water.

  1. Lexical resource

    Revisedgreen space

    'Green space' is a more precise and academic term for IELTS writing.

The removal of agricultural land made room for golf and tennis courses, and holiday homes have been built at the expense of removing the public park near the hotel, which has so far been enlarged. While the residential areas have been extended with newly-built complexes, .

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedSince then, Shakefield has undergone a number of significant changes.

    'Makeovers' is informal and less precise; 'changes' is more academic and appropriate.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    Revisedthe sports venues have been converted into restaurants

    'Converted' is more accurate for describing a change of use.

  3. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedCottages have been built where the fish market once stood, but the coffee shop has remained unchanged.

    This revision clarifies the sequence of changes and improves cohesion.

  4. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOther alterations include the removal of the morning fish boats and the introduction of yachts.

    Corrected subject-verb agreement and pluralization for clarity.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is logically organized, with clear paragraphs for the introduction, description of the past, and description of the present. There is a good use of linking words and phrases, though some transitions could be smoother. Occasionally, the sequencing of information is slightly confusing, and some details are not grouped as clearly as possible.

Suggestions

  • Group related changes together for better clarity.
  • Use more explicit linking phrases to guide the reader through the changes.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedSince then, Shakefield has undergone a number of significant changes.

    'Makeovers' is informal and less precise; 'changes' is more academic and appropriate.

  • RevisedOther alterations include the removal of the morning fish boats and the introduction of yachts.

    Corrected subject-verb agreement and pluralization for clarity.

  • RevisedCottages have been built where the fish market once stood, but the coffee shop has remained unchanged.

    This revision clarifies the sequence of changes and improves cohesion.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of sentence structures, with mostly accurate grammar. There are a few errors in subject-verb agreement, pluralization, and tense consistency. Complex sentences are used, but some could be clearer or more accurate.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOther alterations include the removal of the morning fish boats and the introduction of yachts.

    Corrected subject-verb agreement and pluralization.

  • Revisedthe coffee shop has remained intact

    Tense consistency improved by using present perfect.

  • Revisedthe sports venues have been converted into restaurants

    'Converted' is more accurate for describing a change of use.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The vocabulary is generally varied and appropriate, with some effective use of descriptive language. However, there are occasional inaccuracies and awkward word choices (e.g., 'makeovers,' 'leafy environment'). Some repetition is present.

Sentence revisions 3

  • Revisedgreen space

    'Green space' is a more precise and academic term for IELTS writing.

  • Revisedsignificant developments

    'Significant developments' is more formal and suitable for an academic context.

  • RevisedCottages have replaced the fish market.

    This revision is more concise and clear.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay covers all major changes shown in the diagram and provides a clear overview. Most key features are accurately described, and the comparison between 1995 and the present is clear. Some minor details (such as the addition of apartments) could be highlighted more explicitly.

Suggestions

  • Mention the addition of apartments explicitly.
  • Clarify the changes to the hotel (enlargement).
  • Be precise about the disappearance of the public park and sports venues.

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