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Shakefield town, 1995 and now: IELTS Task 1 answer #32, band 6.0

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240 words. Marked by Axiom on 30 June 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The map this answer describes

Shakefield town, 1995 and now: what the maps show

1995

  • The central area above the main road is dominated by a Public park and a small Hotel.
  • The right-hand area above the road has Farm land in the top-right corner.
  • The coastal/marine area at the bottom left features a Fish market and Morning fish boat.

Present

  • The Public park was replaced by Holiday homes and a Car park.
  • The Farm land in the top right was replaced by a Golf Course and a Tennis Course.
  • The fishing facilities (Fish market and Morning fish boat) were replaced by Apartments and leisure Yachts in the sea.
  • The Sport area was replaced by a Restaurant, while Housing expanded.
  • The Hotel expanded in size, and the Coffee shop remained unchanged.
New by Present
Restaurant, Apartment, Holiday homes, Car park, Golf Course, Tennis Course, Yacht
Gone by Present
Sport, Fish market, Morning fish boat, Public park, Farm land

Academic Task 1240 words

The diagram below shows the changes of the town named shakefield from 1995 untill now

The maps give information about the changes made in a small Shakefield town from 1995 to present.

Overall, the Shakfield town underwent noticeable changes, it became more residential by additional constructed houses.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThey came at the cost of the trees in the center of the map.

    This revision corrects the prepositional error, making the sentence more natural and accurate.

In 1995, the Shakfield was an agricultural town. There were apartments focused on marketing and sport facilities on the left side of the map. At the below of the road, we can find the fish market, with the morning fish boat situated at the sea. on the top of the map, there were agricultural and park facilities.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedAnd there was a road that ran from left to right, across the top and down towards the bottom of the map.

    This revision provides a more natural and accurate expression of the ideas.

At present, the town became more residential with more houses and invested in sport facilities at the golf course and tennis courts. The sport areas came to the cost of farmland, while the public park was turned into holidays homes. At the sea, instead of using boat, the yachts are used for transporting system in the sea. The coffee house did not experience any change.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe hotels, located at the bottom of the road, were enlarged and a new car park was built at the end of this road.

    This revision provides a more natural and accurate expression of the ideas.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedThe number of houses increased on the left side of the map, while the restaurant replaced the sports center.

    This revision corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a more natural expression of the ideas.

  3. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedThe fish market was demolished to make way for more residential areas, and additional apartments were built.

    This revision corrects the verb form and provides a more natural expression of the ideas.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the changes in the town. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions

  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
  • Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe maps illustrate the changes that have taken place in the small town of Shakefield from 1995 to the present.

    This revision provides a more formal and academic tone.

  • RevisedThe Shakefield town underwent significant transformations, becoming more residential due to the addition of new houses.

    This revision provides a more accurate and formal expression of the ideas.

  • RevisedThe sport areas were built on former farmland, and the public park was converted into holiday homes.

    This revision provides a more accurate and formal expression of the ideas.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are free of grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe coffee house remained unchanged.

    This revision provides a more natural and concise expression of the idea.

  • RevisedThe fish market was demolished to make way for more residential areas, and additional apartments were built.

    This revision corrects the verb form and provides a more natural expression of the ideas.

  • RevisedThe number of houses increased on the left side of the map, while the restaurant replaced the sports center.

    This revision corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a more natural expression of the ideas.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThey came at the cost of the trees in the center of the map.

    This revision corrects the prepositional error, making the sentence more natural and accurate.

  • RevisedAnd there was a road that ran from left to right, across the top and down towards the bottom of the map.

    This revision provides a more natural and accurate expression of the ideas.

  • RevisedThe hotels, located at the bottom of the road, were enlarged and a new car park was built at the end of this road.

    This revision provides a more natural and accurate expression of the ideas.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay provides a detailed description of the changes shown on the maps and makes appropriate comparisons where necessary. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the reasons for these changes.

Suggestions

  • Provide a more detailed analysis of the reasons for the changes observed in the town.
  • Make sure to address all parts of the task prompt.

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