Shakefield town, 1995 and now: IELTS Task 1 answer #27, band 5.0
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The map this answer describes
1995
- The central area above the main road is dominated by a Public park and a small Hotel.
- The right-hand area above the road has Farm land in the top-right corner.
- The coastal/marine area at the bottom left features a Fish market and Morning fish boat.
Present
- The Public park was replaced by Holiday homes and a Car park.
- The Farm land in the top right was replaced by a Golf Course and a Tennis Course.
- The fishing facilities (Fish market and Morning fish boat) were replaced by Apartments and leisure Yachts in the sea.
- The Sport area was replaced by a Restaurant, while Housing expanded.
- The Hotel expanded in size, and the Coffee shop remained unchanged.
- New by Present
- Restaurant, Apartment, Holiday homes, Car park, Golf Course, Tennis Course, Yacht
- Gone by Present
- Sport, Fish market, Morning fish boat, Public park, Farm land
Academic Task 1209 words
The diagram below shows the changes of the town named Shakefield from 1995 until now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The map illustrates how the town named Shakefield changed from 1995 till today.Overall, farm field, green are, sport vanues fish market, and harbor were removed from the city to create room for golf and tennis courts, lodging, car park, restaurants and apartment buildings.
Lexical resource
RevisedAdditionally, there was an expansion in lodging and accommodations, the café was relocated, and a place for yachts was allocated.
Corrected spelling errors and improved sentence structure.
In 1995, the area, which used for farming, was located top-right of the map, next to it was city park, which was in neighbourhood with hotel. Right bottom of it was located coffee house and beside of raod on the left there were sport facilities and housing buldings.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFinally, at the bottom left of the map, there was a sea market where fresh catches were delivered from the dock just below the market.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence clarity.
Over time, Shakefield has seen significant changes. Removal of agricultural field made place to build golf and tennis courses, and holiday houses and car park were built instead of city park. And hotel next to it was expanded as housing . The cottages have been built on the site of demolished market. Since, there dock was not exist anymore, the city authories designated the area for yachts.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe area where the sports complexes were located has been transformed into restaurants.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved clarity.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay provides a basic overview of the changes in Shakefield but lacks clear organization and logical flow. Some comparisons are made, but they are not consistently clear or well-structured.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different time periods or types of changes.
- Ensure logical progression of ideas.
- Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the farmland, green areas, sports venues, fish market, and harbor were removed to make room for golf and tennis courts, lodging, a car park, restaurants, and apartment buildings.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
RevisedIn 1995, the farmland was located in the top-right corner of the map, next to the city park, which was adjacent to the hotel.
Clarified location and relationship between elements.
RevisedThe area where the sports complexes were located has been transformed into restaurants.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay contains several grammatical errors, including incorrect verb forms and sentence structures. The range of grammatical structures is limited.
Sentence revisions 2
RevisedIn 1995, the farmland was located in the top-right corner of the map, next to the city park, which was adjacent to the hotel.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence clarity.
RevisedFinally, at the bottom left of the map, there was a sea market where fresh catches were delivered from the dock just below the market.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with several spelling errors. Some words are used inaccurately or repetitively.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the farmland, green areas, sports venues, fish market, and harbor were removed to make room for golf and tennis courts, lodging, a car park, restaurants, and apartment buildings.
Corrected spelling errors and improved word choice.
RevisedAdditionally, there was an expansion in lodging and accommodations, the café was relocated, and a place for yachts was allocated.
Corrected spelling errors and improved sentence structure.
RevisedSince the dock no longer exists, the city authorities designated the area for yachts.
Corrected spelling errors and improved clarity.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task by describing changes in Shakefield, but it lacks detailed comparisons and some inaccuracies are present.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between the two time periods.
- Ensure all information is accurately represented.
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