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Visitors to three areas: IELTS Task 1 answer #46, band 6.5

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205 words. Marked by Axiom on 1 November 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The line graph this answer describes

Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph)The coast, The mountains, The lakes for 1987, 1992, 1997, 2002, 2007, in thousand visitors. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.02040608019871992199720022007
Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph)The coast, The mountains, The lakes for 1987, 1992, 1997, 2002, 2007, in thousand visitors. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.02040608019871992199720022007
Values in thousand visitors. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand visitors)
The coastThe mountainsThe lakes
1987402010
1992352525
1997483040
2002623175
2007753550

Academic Task 1205 words

The line graph shows the number of overseas visitors to three diffirent areas in a european country between 1987 and 2007

The line graph compares the trajectory of foreigners visiting to three different locations, namely, the coast, the mountains and the lakes in a European country over two decades.

Overall, although, the number of foreign visitors to each area was erratic, all three locations exhibited a general increase over the period. The largest number of overseas visitors were observed at the coast, the opposite was true for the mountains, with the lakes experienced markedly fluctuations throughout the period.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThroughout the period, the coast consistently attracted the highest number of foreign visitors in comparison to the other locations, maintaining its leading position.

    Improves sentence structure and clarity.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedInitially, the number of foreign visitors to the coast was 40,000. By 2007, this number had increased to approximately 75,000, despite a slight decline in 1992.

    Improves word choice and clarity.

At the start of the period the lakes welcomed only 10000 visitors from abroad.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedBy 2002, it increased drastically, peaking at around 75,000, before declining to 50,000 by the end of the period, securing the second position.

    Refines vocabulary and enhances clarity.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedIn contrast, the mountains were consistently the least visited area over the period.

    Improves phrasing and lexical choice.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedIn 1987, the mountains attracted 20,000 overseas visitors, fluctuating over the period, rising to around 35,000 by 2007.

    Corrects spelling and punctuation errors.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay maintains overall coherence with logical progression, but certain parts need better linkage.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to improve flow.
  • Clarify comparisons between different periods and locations.
  • Better summarize key trends.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe largest number of overseas visitors were observed at the coast, whereas the mountains consistently attracted fewer visitors.

    Clarifies the relationship between the coast and mountains.

  • RevisedThe lakes experienced marked fluctuations throughout the period.

    Corrects a grammatical error and improves clarity.

  • RevisedThroughout the period, the coast consistently attracted the highest number of foreign visitors in comparison to the other locations, maintaining its leading position.

    Improves sentence structure and clarity.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

Some grammatical errors and inconsistent use of tense disrupt fluency.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOver the period, the coast attracted the highest number of foreign visitors compared to other locations, maintaining its leading position.

    Corrects agreement and redundancy errors.

  • RevisedIn 1987, the mountains attracted 20,000 overseas visitors, fluctuating over the period, rising to around 35,000 by 2007.

    Corrects spelling and punctuation errors.

  • RevisedThe lakes experienced marked fluctuations throughout the period.

    Corrects adjective use and improves clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

Good range of vocabulary, though some word choices could be refined.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedInitially, the number of foreign visitors to the coast was 40,000. By 2007, this number had increased to approximately 75,000, despite a slight decline in 1992.

    Improves word choice and clarity.

  • RevisedBy 2002, it increased drastically, peaking at around 75,000, before declining to 50,000 by the end of the period, securing the second position.

    Refines vocabulary and enhances clarity.

  • RevisedIn contrast, the mountains were consistently the least visited area over the period.

    Improves phrasing and lexical choice.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses key trends and comparisons but lacks precise data representation at certain points.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data points to enhance description.
  • Ensure all key trends are highlighted clearly and accurately.
  • Avoid generalizations and focus on data-driven observations.

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