Visitors to three areas: IELTS Task 1 answer #49, band 7.0
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199 words. Marked by Axiom on 3 July 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| The coast | The mountains | The lakes | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1987 | 40 | 20 | 10 |
| 1992 | 35 | 25 | 25 |
| 1997 | 48 | 30 | 40 |
| 2002 | 62 | 31 | 75 |
| 2007 | 75 | 35 | 50 |
Academic Task 1199 words
The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas of a European country between 1987 and 2007.
The line graph compares changes in the number of foreign visitors to three visitor destinations of a European country from 1987 to 2007.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedAll figures are measured in thousands.
This revision corrects the grammatical structure.
Overall, the number of tourists to all areas increased over time, albeit to varying degrees.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIt is also clear that the mountains consistently attracted fewer visitors, whereas both the coast and the lakes saw higher numbers, particularly in later years.
This revision clarifies the comparison and avoids awkward phrasing.
In 1987, the number of visitors to the coast was well below 40, the highest figure in the chart in that year.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAfter declining to about 32, the number of visitors to the coast increased steadily, reaching 70 by 2007.
This revision improves the logical flow and clarity.
The number of visitors to the lakes also increased markedly over the period. However, it , decreasing to approximately 55.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis figure started at 10, grew slowly to nearly 35 by 1997, and then rose dramatically to reach a peak of about 75 in 2002.
This revision improves sentence structure and clarity.
Lexical resource
Revisedexperienced a decline in 2007
'Experienced' is a more precise and formal verb for describing trends.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn contrast, the number of visitors to the mountains showed only a modest increase, starting at around 19 in 1987.
This revision uses a more natural transition and sentence structure.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis number rose to about 28 in 1997, then decreased to 21 in 2002 before peaking at 30 in 2007.
This revision clarifies the sequence of changes and improves grammatical accuracy.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and uses clear paragraphs to separate different ideas. There is a clear overview and the sequencing of information is logical. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother, and there is occasional repetition.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to improve flow.
- Avoid repeating similar sentence structures.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIt is also clear that the mountains consistently attracted fewer visitors, whereas both the coast and the lakes saw higher numbers, particularly in later years.
This revision clarifies the comparison and avoids awkward phrasing.
RevisedAfter declining to about 32, the number of visitors to the coast increased steadily, reaching 70 by 2007.
This revision improves the logical flow and clarity.
RevisedIn contrast, the number of visitors to the mountains showed only a modest increase, starting at around 19 in 1987.
This revision uses a more natural transition and sentence structure.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with mostly accurate usage. There are some awkward constructions and minor errors, but they do not impede understanding.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThis number rose to about 28 in 1997, then decreased to 21 in 2002 before peaking at 30 in 2007.
This revision clarifies the sequence of changes and improves grammatical accuracy.
RevisedAll figures are measured in thousands.
This revision corrects the grammatical structure.
RevisedThis figure started at 10, grew slowly to nearly 35 by 1997, and then rose dramatically to reach a peak of about 75 in 2002.
This revision improves sentence structure and clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, with some variety in word choice. There are occasional awkward phrases and some repetition, but overall the vocabulary is sufficient for the task.
Sentence revisions 3
Revisedrose sharply to 70 in 2007
This is a more formal phrase suitable for academic writing.
Revisedexperienced a decline in 2007
'Experienced' is a more precise and formal verb for describing trends.
Revisedwith approximately 19 visitors in 1987
This revision avoids the awkward use of 'accounting for' in this context.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay provides a clear summary of the main trends and comparisons, accurately reflecting the data in the graph. Key features are highlighted, and the overview is effective. Some minor details could be more precise, but overall the task is well addressed.
Suggestions
- Include more precise figures where possible to enhance accuracy.
- Highlight the most significant changes for each area.
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