Visitors to three areas: IELTS Task 1 answer #42, band 7.0

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Values in thousand visitors. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.

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Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand visitors)
	The coast	The mountains	The lakes
1987	40	20	10
1992	35	25	25
1997	48	30	40
2002	62	31	75
2007	75	35	50

Academic Task 1127 words

THe graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three diferent areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

The line graph illustrates the number of tourists visiting the coast, mountains, and lakes of a particular country in Europe from 1987 to 2007.

Overall, the number of international visitors to all three areas increased over the given period. Much more tourists came to the coast and lakes than the mountains.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, the number of international visitors to all three areas increased over the given period, with the coast and lakes experiencing more significant growth than the mountains.
Added more detail to enhance coherence.
Lexical resource
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RevisedMany more tourists visited the coast and lakes compared to the mountains.
Corrected 'much more' to 'many more' for grammatical accuracy.

In 1987, 40,000 tourists visited the coast. Despite a slight fall in 1992, this figure rose dramatically to 75,000 by the end of the period. The number of visitors to the lakes also grew. This figure increased sevenfold over the 15-year period before a decline to 50,000 in 2007.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedIn 1987, the coast attracted 40,000 tourists.
Rephrased to improve sentence flow.
Lexical resource
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RevisedThe number of visitors to the lakes also experienced growth.
Used 'experienced growth' for lexical variety.

In comparison, much fewer tourists visited the mountains. In 1987, 20,000 visitors came to the mountains, and this number climbed insignificantly to 35,000 by the final year.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedIn comparison, significantly fewer tourists visited the mountains.
Improved clarity by using 'significantly' instead of 'much.'

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is generally well-organized with clear progression of ideas.

Suggestions

Ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic.
Use more linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, the number of international visitors to all three areas increased over the given period, with the coast and lakes experiencing more significant growth than the mountains.
Added more detail to enhance coherence.
RevisedIn 1987, the coast attracted 40,000 tourists.
Rephrased to improve sentence flow.
RevisedIn comparison, significantly fewer tourists visited the mountains.
Improved clarity by using 'significantly' instead of 'much.'

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with occasional errors.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedMany more tourists visited the coast and lakes than the mountains.
Corrected 'much more' to 'many more' for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedIn 1987, the coast attracted 40,000 tourists.
Rephrased for grammatical variety.
RevisedThis number increased slightly to 35,000 by the final year.
Replaced 'insignificantly' with 'slightly' for better accuracy.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some flexibility and precision.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedThis figure increased sharply to 75,000 by the end of the period.
Replaced 'dramatically' with 'sharply' for variety.
RevisedThe number of visitors to the lakes also experienced growth.
Used 'experienced growth' for lexical variety.
RevisedThis figure increased sevenfold over the 20-year period.
Corrected the time frame to match the graph.
RevisedMany more tourists visited the coast and lakes compared to the mountains.
Corrected 'much more' to 'many more' for grammatical accuracy.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the trends.

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