Visitors to three areas: IELTS Task 1 answer #50, band 6.0
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192 words. Marked by Axiom on 6 July 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| The coast | The mountains | The lakes | |
|---|---|---|---|
| 1987 | 40 | 20 | 10 |
| 1992 | 35 | 25 | 25 |
| 1997 | 48 | 30 | 40 |
| 2002 | 62 | 31 | 75 |
| 2007 | 75 | 35 | 50 |
Academic Task 1192 words
The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares three parts of a country in Europe according to the number of visitors from 1987 to 2007.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, the number of overseas visitors increased in all areas, but to different extents. However, the number of visitors to the lakes dropped sharply at the end of the period.
This revision clarifies the trends and avoids confusion between the lakes and mountains.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe coast attracted the highest number of visitors throughout the period, making it the most popular destination.
This revision improves clarity and cohesion by directly stating the main point.
Then, both reached their peak at 75 thousand and 35 thousand, respectively, by 2007, with the mountain experiencing a slight decline in 2002.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 1987, the coast had about 40,000 visitors, which fell slightly to 35,000 by 1992. In contrast, the mountains started at 20,000 visitors, rose to 30,000, then dropped back to 20,000 by 1992.
Breaking this sentence into two makes the comparison clearer and easier to follow.
Turning to the lakes, the number of people who visited lakes soared in 1987, up from 10 thousand to about 75 thousand prior to an abrupt plunge to 50 thousand in 2007.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThis made the lakes the second most visited area by the end of the period.
Improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphs and some effective use of linking words. However, there is some confusion in the sequencing of information and a lack of clarity in the comparisons. Some sentences are overly complex or awkward, which affects the overall flow.
Suggestions
- Use clearer topic sentences for each paragraph.
- Ensure that comparisons are explicitly stated and easy to follow.
- Avoid overly complex sentence structures that may confuse the reader.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the number of overseas visitors increased in all areas, but to different extents. However, the number of visitors to the lakes dropped sharply at the end of the period.
This revision clarifies the trends and avoids confusion between the lakes and mountains.
RevisedThe coast attracted the highest number of visitors throughout the period, making it the most popular destination.
This revision improves clarity and cohesion by directly stating the main point.
RevisedIn 1987, the coast had about 40,000 visitors, which fell slightly to 35,000 by 1992. In contrast, the mountains started at 20,000 visitors, rose to 30,000, then dropped back to 20,000 by 1992.
Breaking this sentence into two makes the comparison clearer and easier to follow.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
There is a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but some sentences are overly long or awkward. Occasional grammatical errors and awkward phrasing reduce clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
Revisedalthough the number of overseas visitors increased in all areas, the rate of increase varied significantly
This revision improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.
Revisedthe lakes saw a considerable drop in visitor numbers at the end of the period
Corrects the subject and improves grammatical structure.
RevisedThis made the lakes the second most visited area by the end of the period.
Improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The vocabulary is generally appropriate, with some attempts at variety. However, there are occasional awkward word choices and some repetition. Some phrases are unclear or imprecise.
Sentence revisions 3
Revisedincreased overall, but at different rates
'Negligibly' is inaccurate as the increases are significant for some areas.
Revisedthe lakes experienced a significant decline at the end of the period
The sentence confuses the trends; the lakes, not the mountains, saw a sharp decline.
Revisedmaking it the most popular area
'Predominant' is less natural in this context; 'most popular' is clearer.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the main trends and comparisons, but there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data (confusing the lakes and mountains). Some key features are not clearly or accurately described. The summary is present but could be more precise.
Suggestions
- Double-check the data to ensure accuracy in describing trends.
- Clearly highlight the most significant changes and comparisons.
- Avoid confusing the trends of different areas.
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