Visitors to three areas: IELTS Task 1 answer #38, band 5.0

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Values in thousand visitors. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.

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Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand visitors)
	The coast	The mountains	The lakes
1987	40	20	10
1992	35	25	25
1997	48	30	40
2002	62	31	75
2007	75	35	50

Academic Task 1143 words

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

The line graph compares three European areas, namely coast, lakes and mountains between 1987 to 2007. Units are represented in thousands.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThe line graph compares the number of overseas visitors to three European areas: the coast, lakes, and mountains, from 1987 to 2007.
Improved clarity and specificity.
Lexical resource
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RevisedThe figures are represented in thousands.
Varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.

Overall, the coast showed highest preference by tourists, the reverse was true in the case of lakes and mountain, which experienced same rate. Of particular note is coast, dominated by the end of period.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedNotably, the coast dominated in terms of visitor numbers by the end of the period.
Improved clarity and coherence.

When it comes to coast, by starting of the year it stood at 40,000, in 1992 showed markedly decrease to 35,000 before reaching peak of 75,000 significantly by the end of the year.

Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedAt the beginning of the period, it stood at 40,000. In 1992, it showed a marked decrease to 35,000 before significantly reaching a peak of 75,000 by the end of the period.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

On the one hand, mountains and lakes showed same tempo, the mountains started with 20,000 in 1987, and experienced steadily increase to 35,000 in 2007. When it comes to lakes it showed significantly rise to 40,000, and showed the highest peak of 75,000, by the end of the period it showed slightly decrease to 50,000.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedThe mountains and lakes showed similar trends. The mountains started with 20,000 visitors in 1987 and steadily increased to 35,000 by 2007.
Separated ideas into clearer sentences for better coherence.
Lexical resource
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RevisedThe lakes experienced a significant rise to 40,000 visitors, reaching a peak of 75,000, before slightly decreasing to 50,000 by the end of the period.
Improved lexical choice and sentence structure.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression of ideas. There is some attempt to use cohesive devices, but they are not always used appropriately.

Suggestions

Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
Ensure logical progression of ideas.
Use appropriate linking words to connect ideas.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, the coast was the most preferred by tourists, while the lakes and mountains experienced similar rates of visitation.
Clarified the comparison and improved sentence structure.
RevisedNotably, the coast dominated in terms of visitor numbers by the end of the period.
Improved clarity and coherence.
RevisedThe mountains and lakes showed similar trends. The mountains started with 20,000 visitors in 1987 and steadily increased to 35,000 by 2007.
Separated ideas into clearer sentences for better coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures. There is limited use of complex structures.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedAt the beginning of the period, it stood at 40,000. In 1992, it showed a marked decrease to 35,000 before significantly reaching a peak of 75,000 by the end of the period.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.
RevisedThe mountains and lakes showed a similar trend. The mountains started with 20,000 visitors in 1987 and steadily increased to 35,000 by 2007.
Improved grammatical accuracy and sentence clarity.
RevisedThe lakes experienced a significant rise to 40,000 visitors, reaching a peak of 75,000, before slightly decreasing to 50,000 by the end of the period.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence flow.

Lexical resource

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some inaccuracies. There is some repetition of words and phrases.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedThe line graph compares the number of overseas visitors to three European areas: the coast, lakes, and mountains, from 1987 to 2007.
Improved clarity and specificity.
RevisedThe lakes experienced a significant rise to 40,000 visitors, reaching a peak of 75,000, before slightly decreasing to 50,000 by the end of the period.
Improved lexical choice and sentence structure.
RevisedThe figures are represented in thousands.
Varied vocabulary to avoid repetition.
Revisedat the beginning of the period, it stood at 40,000
Corrected the phrase for better lexical accuracy.

Task achievement

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and clear explanation of trends. Some data is inaccurately described.

Suggestions

Provide more detailed analysis of trends.
Ensure accurate description of data.
Include more specific data points to support analysis.

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