Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #31, band 7.0
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| Japan | US | China | India | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 1990 | 26 | 11 | 2 | 1 |
| 1995 | 20 | 8 | 3 | 1 |
| 2000 | 18 | 11 | 5 | 1 |
| 2005 | 18 | 8 | 11 | 5 |
| 2010 | 17 | 5 | 25 | 7 |
| 2012 | 17 | 7 | 28 | 5 |
Academic Task 1268 words
The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting
Overall, while China and India experienced a growth in imports from Australia, Australian exports to Japan and the US declined.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe chart compares four countries in terms of imports from Australia between 1990 and 2012.
Corrected the expression 'in term of' to 'in terms of' and 'import' to 'imports' for accuracy.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAlthough Japan was the main importing country of Australia from the 1990s to the 2000s, Australian exports to China dramatically increased, making China the biggest commodity partner by the end of the term.
Removed unnecessary comma for smoother flow.
However, the figure for India levelled off between 1990 and 2000, before rising up to 5% in 2005. China, on the other hand, witnessed a significant increase to around 13% in 2005, before a further improvement to 27% in the final year.
Lexical resource
RevisedInitially, both Chinese and Indian imports from Australia were less than 5%, and this trend continued until 2000, when China's imports rose to roughly 5%.
Simplified and clarified the sentence for better readability.
Lexical resource
RevisedAfter experiencing growth to 8% in 2009, India's figure declined again to 5% in 2012.
Improved clarity and precision of expression.
Japan and the US bucked the trend. Although having a small rise by about 2%, the figure for Japan gradually decreased, plummeting to around 18% in 1999.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn 1990, Australia’s export to Japan was 25%, whereas that to the USA was only 13%.
Capitalized 'In' and corrected 'that of USA' to 'that to the USA' for grammatical accuracy.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThere was a fluctuation in the figure for the US, with figures dipping to 8% and then rising again in 1999 to 13%.
Improved sentence flow by removing unnecessary commas.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedBy the 2000s, Japan’s import rate from Australia fluctuated between 16% and 20%, finishing at 18% in 2012.
Added 'the' before '2000s' and removed unnecessary comma for grammatical accuracy.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedRegarding the US, after the 2000s, the figure for that country started to decline, dipping as low as 5% in 2010 before a small increase of 2% in 2012.
Clarified the time period and improved sentence structure.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is generally well-organized with clear paragraphing and logical progression of ideas.
Suggestions
- Ensure consistent use of linking words.
- Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAlthough Japan was the main importing country of Australia from the 1990s to the 2000s, Australian exports to China dramatically increased, making China the biggest commodity partner by the end of the term.
Removed unnecessary comma for smoother flow.
RevisedThere was a fluctuation in the figure for the US, with figures dipping to 8% and then rising again in 1999 to 13%.
Improved sentence flow by removing unnecessary commas.
RevisedRegarding the US, after the 2000s, the figure for that country started to decline, dipping as low as 5% in 2010 before a small increase of 2% in 2012.
Clarified the time period and improved sentence structure.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures, but there are some errors that affect clarity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAlthough Japan was the main importing country of Australia from the 1990s to the 2000s, Australian exports to China dramatically increased, making China the biggest commodity partner by the end of the term.
Removed unnecessary comma for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedIn 1990, Australia’s export to Japan was 25%, whereas that to the USA was only 13%.
Capitalized 'In' and corrected 'that of USA' to 'that to the USA' for grammatical accuracy.
RevisedBy the 2000s, Japan’s import rate from Australia fluctuated between 16% and 20%, finishing at 18% in 2012.
Added 'the' before '2000s' and removed unnecessary comma for grammatical accuracy.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task, though some expressions could be more precise.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe chart compares four countries in terms of imports from Australia between 1990 and 2012.
Corrected the expression 'in term of' to 'in terms of' and 'import' to 'imports' for accuracy.
RevisedInitially, both Chinese and Indian imports from Australia were less than 5%, and this trend continued until 2000, when China's imports rose to roughly 5%.
Simplified and clarified the sentence for better readability.
RevisedAfter experiencing growth to 8% in 2009, India's figure declined again to 5% in 2012.
Improved clarity and precision of expression.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing key trends and making relevant comparisons.
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