Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #30, band 4.5

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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
	Japan	US	China	India
1990	26	11	2	1
1995	20	8	3	1
2000	18	11	5	1
2005	18	8	11	5
2010	17	5	25	7
2012	17	7	28	5

Academic Task 1156 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.

The line graph shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 and to 2012.

Overll, It is clearly evident that Japan and Use significantly decrease over the period, but India gradually increase to 2010, next go down to 2012. Unlike other countries, China remarkably improve approximately to 2007, however, it haa risen sharply after 2007.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, it is evident that exports to Japan and the US decreased significantly over the period, while exports to India increased until 2010 before declining by 2012.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
Lexical resource
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RevisedUnlike other countries, exports to China improved significantly until 2007 and then rose sharply after 2007.
Corrected spelling and improved word choice.

If we look at Japan, it began from 1990 with 25%, but from 1990 to around 2003 significantly decrease. From 2003 to 2012 fluctuated. Following this, US began in 1990 and to 1995 remarkably decrease,however, grow up between 1995 and 2000. After 2000, it is go down to 2010 and it rise remaining period.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedExports to Japan started at 25% in 1990 and decreased significantly until around 2003.
Clarified the sentence and removed unnecessary words.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedExports to the US began in 1990, decreased until 1995, and then increased between 1995 and 2000.
Improved sentence flow and coherence.

With respect to India, it from 1990 to 2000 negligibly increase. After 2000, it is considerably improve to 2010, but it go down in the remaining period. Finally China it from 1990 to around 2008 significantly increase and grow sharply between 2008 and 2010.

Lexical resource
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RevisedAfter 2000, exports to India improved considerably until 2010, but then declined in the remaining period.
Improved word choice and sentence structure.
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RevisedFinally, exports to China increased significantly from 1990 to around 2008 and grew sharply between 2008 and 2010.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay attempts to describe the trends in the graph but lacks clear organization and logical flow.

Suggestions

Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
Use linking words to connect ideas.
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a specific trend or country.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, it is evident that exports to Japan and the US decreased significantly over the period, while exports to India increased until 2010 before declining by 2012.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
RevisedExports to Japan started at 25% in 1990 and decreased significantly until around 2003.
Clarified the sentence and removed unnecessary words.
RevisedExports to the US began in 1990, decreased until 1995, and then increased between 1995 and 2000.
Improved sentence flow and coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 4.0/ 9

The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence constructions.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, it is evident that exports to Japan and the US decreased significantly over the period, while exports to India increased until 2010 before declining by 2012.
Corrected subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.
RevisedExports to Japan started at 25% in 1990 and decreased significantly until around 2003.
Corrected verb tense and improved sentence clarity.
RevisedExports to the US began in 1990, decreased until 1995, and then increased between 1995 and 2000.
Corrected verb tense and sentence structure.

Lexical resource

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay uses basic vocabulary with some repetition and errors.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedOverall, it is clearly evident that exports to Japan and the US decreased significantly over the period, while exports to India gradually increased until 2010 before declining by 2012.
Corrected spelling and improved word choice.
RevisedUnlike other countries, exports to China improved significantly until 2007 and then rose sharply after 2007.
Corrected spelling and improved word choice.
RevisedAfter 2000, exports to India improved considerably until 2010, but then declined in the remaining period.
Improved word choice and sentence structure.
RevisedFinally, exports to China increased significantly from 1990 to around 2008 and grew sharply between 2008 and 2010.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.

Task achievement

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and comparison.

Suggestions

Provide more detailed comparisons between countries.
Include specific data points to support descriptions.
Ensure all trends are clearly explained.

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