Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #49, band 5.0
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159 words. Marked by Axiom on 4 January 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
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| Japan | US | China | India | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 1990 | 26 | 11 | 2 | 1 |
| 1995 | 20 | 8 | 3 | 1 |
| 2000 | 18 | 11 | 5 | 1 |
| 2005 | 18 | 8 | 11 | 5 |
| 2010 | 17 | 5 | 25 | 7 |
| 2012 | 17 | 7 | 28 | 5 |
Academic Task 1159 words
The graph below shows that the percentage of Australian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
The graph illustrates information about the percentage of Australian export to 4 countries over the period 22 year, between 1990 and 2012.
Despite these changes, with the China topping the list and USA and India significantly logging behind.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, China stands as the country with the highest figures in terms of Australian exports.
The original sentence was unclear. The revision provides a clear and concise summary of the main trend.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIt is noted that Japan remained stable throughout the period.
The revised sentence is clearer and more concise.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn detail, the highest figure for Japan remained stable over the years, only experiencing sharp increases and never decreasing. The figure reached about 30 tons of goods in 2012.
The revised sentence is clearer and more grammatically accurate.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn other news, Japan reached 30 tons of goods in 1990, but after 5 years, the figure decreased to 20 tons and remained unchanged until the end of the period.
The revised sentence is clearer and more concise.
In the last two figure, USA and India is the decrease without increase all of the year , the India and USA reached 5 tons goods final the year.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay has a clear overall structure and maintains a logical order of information. However, the use of cohesive devices is inconsistent, and some sentences are difficult to follow, which disrupts the overall coherence.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices appropriately.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences within the paragraph relate to this topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, China stands as the country with the highest figures in terms of Australian exports.
The original sentence was unclear. The revision provides a clear and concise summary of the main trend.
RevisedIt is noted that Japan remained stable throughout the period.
The revised sentence is clearer and more concise.
RevisedIn other news, Japan reached 30 tons of goods in 1990, but after 5 years, the figure decreased to 20 tons and remained unchanged until the end of the period.
The revised sentence is clearer and more concise.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay contains several grammatical errors and some sentences are difficult to understand due to issues with grammar and punctuation.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn detail, the highest figure for Japan remained stable over the years, only experiencing sharp increases and never decreasing. The figure reached about 30 tons of goods in 2012.
The revised sentence is clearer and more grammatically accurate.
RevisedIn other news, Japan reached 30 tons of goods in the first year in 1990, but after 5 years, the figure decreased to 20 tons and remained unchanged by the end of the period.
The revised sentence is clearer and more grammatically accurate.
RevisedThe USA and India reached 5 tons of goods by the end of the year.
The revised sentence is clearer and more grammatically accurate.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies and inappropriate word choices that affect the clarity of the text.
Sentence revisions 3
Revisedthe highest exports were to China among all the figures.
The term 'overseas' is not appropriate in this context. The term 'figures' should be replaced with 'data'.
RevisedIt is mentioned that Japan remained unchanged throughout the period.
The word 'given' is not needed in this context.
RevisedThe USA and India experienced a decrease without any increase throughout the year.
The revised sentence is clearer and more grammatically accurate.
Task achievement
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay provides an adequate response to the task. The key features are identified and supported with some relevant data. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and by making sure that all information is accurately represented.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data. This could involve discussing trends, patterns, or comparisons in more detail.
- Make sure that all information is accurately represented. There are a few instances in the essay where the data is not accurately represented, which could lead to confusion.
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