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Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #50, band 5.5

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The line graph this answer describes

Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199019952000200520102012
Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199020002010
Values in % of Australian exports. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
Show the data
Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
JapanUSChinaIndia
1990261121
199520831
2000181151
2005188115
2010175257
2012177285

Academic Task 1210 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe line graph illustrates the percentage of exports to four different countries from 1990 to 2012.

    Using 'illustrates' instead of 'shows' adds variety.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, China's exports initially were lower than those to Japan and the US, but experienced sharp growth, eventually surpassing all three countries.

    The sentence was rephrased for clarity and conciseness.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedIn contrast, exports to Japan and the United States dropped moderately with slight fluctuations.

    Improved sentence structure for clarity.

  3. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedFinally, India's export ratio remained the lowest throughout the period.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity.

At the beginning, Japan stood at around 25 % with the highest level and kept the dominant role by around 2007. In contrast, the figure for Japan decreased to 17% by the end of the period.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedHowever, its dominance did not last, as China overtook it in 2007, with sales growing to 20% and continuing to rise to approximately 28%.

    Improved sentence structure and clarity.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedSimilarly, the US and India showed opposite trends until mid-2006.

    The sentence was rephrased to improve clarity and coherence.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedThe sales to the US were at 12% the previous year, before dropping steadily by 7%.

    Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear connections between ideas. Some sentences are unclear or awkwardly phrased, affecting the overall flow.

Suggestions

  • Use linking words to connect ideas more clearly.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Clarify ambiguous sentences.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, China's exports initially were lower than those to Japan and the US, but experienced sharp growth, eventually surpassing all three countries.

    The sentence was rephrased for clarity and conciseness.

  • RevisedFinally, India's export ratio remained the lowest throughout the period.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity.

  • RevisedSimilarly, the US and India showed opposite trends until mid-2006.

    The sentence was rephrased to improve clarity and coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures that affect readability. There is a limited range of complex structures.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe sales to the US were at 12% the previous year, before dropping steadily by 7%.

    Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

  • RevisedIn contrast, exports to Japan and the United States dropped moderately with slight fluctuations.

    Improved sentence structure for clarity.

  • RevisedHowever, its dominance did not last, as China overtook it in 2007, with sales growing to 20% and continuing to rise to approximately 28%.

    Improved sentence structure and clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are awkward or repetitive. There is an attempt to use more advanced vocabulary.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe line graph illustrates the percentage of exports to four different countries from 1990 to 2012.

    Using 'illustrates' instead of 'shows' adds variety.

  • RevisedOverall, China's export figures were initially lower than those of Japan and the US, but then experienced sharp growth, surpassing all three countries.

    Improved word choice for clarity and precision.

  • RevisedFinally, India's export ratio remained the lowest throughout the period.

    Simplified language for clarity.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and describes the main trends, but lacks detailed data and some parts are unclear or inaccurate.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data points to support descriptions.
  • Ensure all trends are accurately described.

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