Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #51, band 6.0
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| Japan | US | China | India | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 1990 | 26 | 11 | 2 | 1 |
| 1995 | 20 | 8 | 3 | 1 |
| 2000 | 18 | 11 | 5 | 1 |
| 2005 | 18 | 8 | 11 | 5 |
| 2010 | 17 | 5 | 25 | 7 |
| 2012 | 17 | 7 | 28 | 5 |
Academic Task 1219 words
The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.
The line graph shows the proportion of Australian exports in four countries- Japan, US, China and India between 1990 and 2012.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, Japan started with the highest amount and then steadily decreased over the period.
The revised sentence provides a clearer explanation of the data, with the use of the past tense to reflect the historical data being discussed.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, China, which had the higher percentage, started to rise slowly until the end of the period.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more logically structured explanation of the data.
According to this figure, Between 1995 and 2005 continued similar trend and then, this figure became a bit fluctuation in 2010. However, China started low amount about 4% in 1990 and reached to 15 % in 2008.
Lexical resource
RevisedJapan began with approximately 25% in 1990 and after a period of stability, fell to 18% in 1995.
The revised sentence uses more appropriate and accurate vocabulary to describe the data.
Lexical resource
RevisedMeanwhile, the other countries saw a rapid increase, reaching 28% in 2012.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more logically structured explanation of the data.
But, India developed very lower than remain of four countries, starting with 2 %, arrived to 5 % for whole years.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAs mentioned, Japan and India became prominent figures until the end of the period.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more logically structured explanation of the data.
Lexical resource
RevisedAdditionally, this country had the lowest percentage among the others.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more logically structured explanation of the data.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe US had 12% in 1990 and rose to 13% in 2000, but the figure dramatically declined to 5% in 2012.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors, making the meaning clear and the usage more accurate.
In conclusion, The percentage of exports shown the best amount in China in the four countries.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedJapan experienced a stable trend in Australian exports over the years.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors, making the meaning clear and the usage more accurate.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, Japan started with the highest amount and then steadily decreased over the period.
The revised sentence provides a clearer explanation of the data, with the use of the past tense to reflect the historical data being discussed.
RevisedHowever, China, which had the higher percentage, started to rise slowly until the end of the period.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more logically structured explanation of the data.
RevisedAs mentioned, Japan and India became prominent figures until the end of the period.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more logically structured explanation of the data.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there is some evidence of a control of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are some errors in the use of articles, prepositions, and verb tenses that affect the clarity of the writing.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedHowever, China, which had the higher percentage, started to rise slowly until the end of the period.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors, making the meaning clear and the usage more accurate.
RevisedThe US had 12% in 1990 and rose to 13% in 2000, but the figure dramatically declined to 5% in 2012.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors, making the meaning clear and the usage more accurate.
RevisedJapan experienced a stable trend in Australian exports over the years.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors, making the meaning clear and the usage more accurate.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use a range of complex language. However, there are some inaccuracies and awkward phrases that affect the clarity of the writing.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedJapan began with approximately 25% in 1990 and after a period of stability, fell to 18% in 1995.
The revised sentence uses more appropriate and accurate vocabulary to describe the data.
RevisedMeanwhile, the other countries saw a rapid increase, reaching 28% in 2012.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more logically structured explanation of the data.
RevisedAdditionally, this country had the lowest percentage among the others.
The revised sentence provides a clearer and more logically structured explanation of the data.
Task achievement
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay provides a clear overview of the data and makes some relevant comparisons. However, the essay does not fully address all parts of the task and there are some inaccuracies in the interpretation of the data.
Suggestions
- Make sure to fully address all parts of the task and to accurately interpret the data.
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data and make more specific comparisons.
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