Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #48, band 5.0

The line graps shows the Australian experting goods to four contries from 1990 to 2012.

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It is clear that Japan was dominant option for Australia to expert, while India was active at exchange of goods. Notably, all figures given in a chart fluctuated to a ceratioin extent with the US experiancing the fluctuation the most, while again India barely changing through the years. Chine was the country that saw the most change in terms of growing which later recieved goods from Australia, despite ranking third at the beginning.

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   RevisedJapan was the dominant destination for Australian exports, while India showed minimal activity in trade.

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   RevisedAll figures in the chart fluctuated to some extent, with the US experiencing the most variation, while India's figures remained relatively stable.

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   RevisedChina experienced the most growth in exports from Australia, eventually surpassing other countries despite starting in third place.

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In 1990, the highst percentage of goods being exported was recorded in Japan with 25%, after which declined to around 16%. Despite this, the figure fluctuated between 20% and 15%, ending the period at approximately at 17% being the second best country for Australia to make a deal with Jaman in 2012. Meanwhile, Chine in particular was even lower with having below 5% of export rate. After which saw significant growth reaching up to its peak at just over 25% breaking the record thet Japan once held in 2012.

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   RevisedIn 1990, Japan had the highest percentage of exports at 25%, which then declined to around 16%.

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As for other two categories, the US witnessed considerable fluctuation all between range of 5-10% change, starting with about 12%, while India was almost non-excisting being at 1%with barely any change except growing to 5% by the end of given years. During this time span the US went back to where it originally started at 12% before going down again to just over 5% renking the second country, whereas India was still in the bottom- most position.

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   RevisedRegarding the other two countries, the US experienced considerable fluctuations between 5-10%, starting at about 12%, while India's exports were almost negligible at 1%, only increasing to 5% by the end of the period.

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