Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #47, band 4.0
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161 words. Marked by Axiom on 20 November 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| Japan | US | China | India | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 1990 | 26 | 11 | 2 | 1 |
| 1995 | 20 | 8 | 3 | 1 |
| 2000 | 18 | 11 | 5 | 1 |
| 2005 | 18 | 8 | 11 | 5 |
| 2010 | 17 | 5 | 25 | 7 |
| 2012 | 17 | 7 | 28 | 5 |
Academic Task 1161 words
The graph below shows that the percentage of Australian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedThe line graph shows the percentage of Australian exports to Japan, the US, China, and India from 1990 to 2012.
The sentence should describe the graph provided, not an unrelated topic.
Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the figure of Paper&Packaging increased dramatically , showing the far most popularity throughout the period . In contrast, Wood Pulp and Sawn-Wood experienced declines, particularly Sawn-Wood had the lowest dagree by 2000 .
In 1980, when the number of Paper&Pacaging was 230 million tonnes , Sawn-wood industry produced 200 million tonnes products.The Paper&Packaging underwent the highest figures over the period, with incresing to 250 million tonnes in 1990, particularly dramatical growth by a hundred million tonnes in the end .
In 1990, the production of Sawn-Wood and Wood Pulp was the same at 150 million tonnes . However, Sawn-Wood continued declining to 130 millon tonnes, overtaking Wood Pulp, which rose slightly by 10 million tonnes the the end of the period.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 4.0/ 9
The essay lacks coherence as it does not address the task. The information provided is unrelated to the graph shown.
Suggestions
- Ensure the essay content matches the task description.
- Use appropriate linking words to connect ideas.
- Organize the essay in a logical order.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe line graph shows the percentage of Australian exports to Japan, the US, China, and India from 1990 to 2012.
The sentence should describe the graph provided, not an unrelated topic.
RevisedOverall, the percentage of exports to China increased significantly, while exports to Japan decreased.
The overview should summarize the main trends in the graph provided.
RevisedIn 1990, Japan was the largest importer of Australian goods, but by 2012, China had overtaken Japan.
The details should relate to the correct data and trends in the graph.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
There are grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the essay. The sentence structures are repetitive and lack complexity.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the percentage of exports to China increased significantly, while those to Japan decreased.
Ensure grammatical accuracy and variety in sentence structures.
RevisedIn 1990, Japan had the highest export percentage, but by 2012, China had surpassed it.
Use correct tense and structure to accurately describe the data.
RevisedHowever, exports to the US remained relatively stable, while those to India showed a slight increase.
Ensure grammatical accuracy and relevance to the task.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The lexical resource is limited and does not accurately describe the graph. Some vocabulary is used incorrectly.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe line graph illustrates the percentage of Australian exports to four countries over a period of 22 years.
Use vocabulary that accurately reflects the task and data.
RevisedOverall, the export percentage to China rose dramatically, indicating a shift in trade patterns.
Use vocabulary that correctly describes the trends in the graph.
RevisedChina's export percentage increased sharply, surpassing other countries by 2012.
Ensure vocabulary is relevant to the graph and task.
Task achievement
Band 3.0/ 9
The task is not achieved as the essay does not describe the graph provided. The content is unrelated to the task.
Suggestions
- Focus on describing the data and trends shown in the graph.
- Provide an accurate summary of the main trends.
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