Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #25, band 4.5
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185 words. Marked by Axiom on 12 March 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The line graph this answer describes
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| Japan | US | China | India | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 1990 | 26 | 11 | 2 | 1 |
| 1995 | 20 | 8 | 3 | 1 |
| 2000 | 18 | 11 | 5 | 1 |
| 2005 | 18 | 8 | 11 | 5 |
| 2010 | 17 | 5 | 25 | 7 |
| 2012 | 17 | 7 | 28 | 5 |
Academic Task 1185 words
The graph below shows that the percentage of Australian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
Lexical resource
RevisedThe line graph illustrates the Australian exports to four countries.
Corrected spelling and improved word choice.
2010 and 2012
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 1990, exports to India were at 0% and remained low until 2000 when they began to increase.
The sentence is revised for clarity and logical flow.
Lexical resource
RevisedThe increase began in 2000 and continued until 2010.
Improved clarity and word choice.
to year plunged dropped from 7 percent to 5 percent.This country the in graph very decline.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedExports to China showed little growth from 1990 to 1995.
The sentence is revised for clarity and coherence.
Lexical resource
RevisedFrom 2000 to 2012, there was a significant rise in percentage.
Simplified and corrected the sentence for clarity.
Australia exports continue country the Usa 1990 to year 10 percentage until and 1995 year little fall. The 2005 and 2010 drop until. It year low goJapan's bar graph is 26 percent in 1990. This has only decreased significantly from 1995 to 2012 and is 18 percent in the graph.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn 2000, the percentage returned to 10%.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.
China's bar graph is increasing significantly. Japan has dropped from a high percentage to a medium percentage and two countries India and the USA occupy the middle percentages in the graph.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, Australia exported its products to four countries, with varying trends over the years.
The sentence is revised to provide a clearer summary.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay lacks clear structure and logical flow. There is some attempt to organize information, but it is not consistently clear or logical.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate information about each country.
- Ensure logical flow by using linking words and phrases.
- Summarize the main trends in the introduction and conclusion.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn 1990, exports to India were at 0% and remained low until 2000 when they began to increase.
The sentence is revised for clarity and logical flow.
RevisedExports to China showed little growth from 1990 to 1995.
The sentence is revised for clarity and coherence.
RevisedOverall, Australia exported its products to four countries, with varying trends over the years.
The sentence is revised to provide a clearer summary.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 4.0/ 9
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedIn 1990, exports to India were at 0% and remained low until 2000 when they began to increase.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.
RevisedExports to the USA were at 10% in 1990 and experienced a slight fall by 1995.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved clarity.
RevisedIn 2000, the percentage returned to 10%.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.
Lexical resource
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with frequent errors in word choice and spelling.
Sentence revisions 4
RevisedThe line graph illustrates the Australian exports to four countries.
Corrected spelling and improved word choice.
RevisedThe increase began in 2000 and continued until 2010.
Improved clarity and word choice.
RevisedFrom 2000 to 2012, there was a significant rise in percentage.
Simplified and corrected the sentence for clarity.
Revisedgrowth
Corrected spelling error.
Task achievement
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay attempts to address the task but lacks clarity and detail in describing the data.
Suggestions
- Provide specific data points to support descriptions.
- Ensure all countries are equally covered in the analysis.
- Summarize key trends effectively.
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