Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #44, band 5.0

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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
	Japan	US	China	India
1990	26	11	2	1
1995	20	8	3	1
2000	18	11	5	1
2005	18	8	11	5
2010	17	5	25	7
2012	17	7	28	5

Academic Task 1212 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph compares about the number of Australian exports to Japan, United States, China and India from 1990 to 2012.

Overview, the Japan had a lead in the begin of the period, while US with Japan gave information about fluctuated decline in the next years, whereas both of neighbor countries, which meant that China and India had upward trend, the China was significant growth, and India was remained stable.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedAt the beginning of the period, Japan had the highest percentage of Australian exports. However, both Japan and the US experienced a fluctuating decline over the years. In contrast, China and India showed an upward trend, with China experiencing significant growth, while India's growth was more stable.
The revision improves clarity and coherence by restructuring the sentence and using appropriate linking words.

Turning to details, in 1990, 25% of Australian exports to Japan was decreased dramatically to approximately 16% in near of 2005 year, after this, exports to Japan increased slowly from 16% to 20% and back to the 18% in 2010. exports in the United States grow up and down from about 12% to 13%, in ten years, while, until 2010, exports to United States fluctuated and significantly decrease to 5% between 2000 and 2010.

Coherence & cohesion
Close revision note
RevisedIn 1990, 25% of Australian exports went to Japan, but this figure decreased dramatically to approximately 16% by 2005. Afterward, exports to Japan increased slowly to 20% before settling at 18% in 2010.
The revision clarifies the timeline and improves sentence structure.
Lexical resource
Close revision note
RevisedExports to the United States fluctuated between 12% and 13% over ten years, and then decreased significantly to 5% between 2000 and 2010.
Improved vocabulary and sentence structure.

When we look at the latter data, it is clear that Australian exports rose considerably in China. In 1990, approximately 3% of exports in China, and from 1990 to 2012, Exports grow to 27%, additionally, the China held the leading position between four countries. As for exports to India, exports rose slightly from 2% to 8% in 20 years, however, after 2010 year, declined to 5% in 2012.

Coherence & cohesion
Close revision note
RevisedExamining the data further, Australian exports to China rose considerably.
The revision uses a more formal tone and improves coherence.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a somewhat organized manner but lacks clarity in some parts. The use of linking words is inconsistent, and the structure could be improved for better flow.

Suggestions

Use more linking words to improve flow.
Organize the essay into clear paragraphs.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedAt the beginning of the period, Japan had the highest percentage of Australian exports. However, both Japan and the US experienced a fluctuating decline over the years. In contrast, China and India showed an upward trend, with China experiencing significant growth, while India's growth was more stable.
The revision improves clarity and coherence by restructuring the sentence and using appropriate linking words.
RevisedIn 1990, 25% of Australian exports went to Japan, but this figure decreased dramatically to approximately 16% by 2005. Afterward, exports to Japan increased slowly to 20% before settling at 18% in 2010.
The revision clarifies the timeline and improves sentence structure.
RevisedExamining the data further, Australian exports to China rose considerably.
The revision uses a more formal tone and improves coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a limited range of grammatical structures with frequent errors. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, tense, and sentence structure.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedInitially, Japan led in Australian exports, while both Japan and the US experienced a fluctuating decline over the years. In contrast, China and India showed upward trends, with China experiencing significant growth and India remaining stable.
Corrected subject-verb agreement and sentence structure.
RevisedIn 1990, 25% of Australian exports went to Japan, but this figure decreased dramatically to approximately 16% by 2005. Afterward, exports to Japan increased slowly to 20% before settling at 18% in 2010.
Corrected tense and sentence structure.
RevisedExamining the data further, Australian exports to China rose considerably.
Improved grammatical accuracy and sentence structure.

Lexical resource

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some repetition and inaccuracies. There is an attempt to use complex words, but they are not always used correctly.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedInitially, Japan led in Australian exports, while both Japan and the US experienced a fluctuating decline over the years. In contrast, China and India showed upward trends, with China experiencing significant growth and India remaining stable.
Improved vocabulary choice and corrected inaccuracies.
RevisedIn 1990, 25% of Australian exports went to Japan, but this figure decreased dramatically to approximately 16% by 2005. Afterward, exports to Japan increased slowly to 20% before settling at 18% in 2010.
Corrected vocabulary inaccuracies and improved clarity.
RevisedExamining the data further, Australian exports to China rose considerably.
Improved vocabulary choice and formal tone.
RevisedExports to the United States fluctuated between 12% and 13% over ten years, and then decreased significantly to 5% between 2000 and 2010.
Improved vocabulary and sentence structure.

Task achievement

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks clarity and precision in some areas. Some key details are missing or inaccurately described.

Suggestions

Ensure all key details from the graph are accurately described.
Provide more precise comparisons between countries.
Clarify any ambiguous statements.

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