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Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #45, band 7.0

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The line graph this answer describes

Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199019952000200520102012
Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199020002010
Values in % of Australian exports. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
JapanUSChinaIndia
1990261121
199520831
2000181151
2005188115
2010175257
2012177285

Academic Task 1284 words

The graph shows that the percentage of Australian export to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph illustrates Australia's export rate to four countries in 22 years, from 1990 to 2012. Overall, the percentage of exports to Japan and the US showed a downward trend, whereas there was an upward trend in the remaining two countries. Notably, the figure for China saw the most substantial change over the period, enlarging the gap between India's figure.

Australia dispatched mostly to Japan and the US in the initial year, ranking Japan first. The percentage of exports to Japan started at approximately 25% before experiencing a notable decrease to 20% in 1995, after which the figure exhibited a steady decline in the ensuing years , eventually settling at 18% in 2012. Share of exports to the US witnessed some fluctuation over the study period. Starting the period with a decline from 11% to 8% , the figure then reverted to its former state in 2000. This proportion then had dropped considerably to 5% by the next decade, before ending the period with a marginal increase.

In contrast, China and India received relatively lower imports from Australia in the early years. The proportion of China began the figure with a modest increase, reaching 5% in 2000, The percentage of China skyrocketed within the following 10 years, recording a five-fold rise. India also followed a similar pattern, albeit at different levels, peaking at 7% in 2010 after a remarkable increase. In the final 2 years, the rate of China showed a negligible growth to 28% , this being the highest figure in the graph. The trend for India, however, underwent a falling trend, dropping to 5%, which made this country the smallest importer.

  1. Lexical resource

    Revised...while the figure for India remained static initially.

    Varied the vocabulary usage for clarity.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay follows a logical structure with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. The overall comparison and trends are described adequately. However, some points could be connected more smoothly.

Suggestions

  • Enhance transitions between paragraphs.
  • Clarify comparisons to reinforce understanding.
  • Use linking words to enhance cohesion.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe percentage of exports to Japan started at approximately 25% before experiencing a notable decrease, indicating a consistent trend over the years.

    Added more detail to connect the information closely.

  • RevisedThe proportion of China exports started with a modest increase, reaching 5% in 2000, and this trend continued in subsequent years.

    Improved coherence by linking trends together.

  • RevisedIn contrast, India's trend witnessed a decline towards the end of the period.

    Used transition words to connect the ideas effectively.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The grammatical structures used are mostly accurate but lack complexity in some areas. There's a good command over tense usage.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe share of exports to the US witnessed several fluctuations.

    Added article and plural form to improve accuracy.

  • RevisedSimilarly, India followed a comparable pattern but at different levels.

    Used a more complex structure for emphasis.

  • RevisedThe percentage of exports to China soared dramatically over the next ten years.

    Used a more complex verb form to enhance variety.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay showcases a good range of vocabulary suitable for describing trends and comparisons. However, there are some repetitive expressions.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, the percentage of exports to Japan and the US declined over the period.

    Used a more specific term to avoid repetition.

  • Revised...while the figure for India remained static initially.

    Varied the vocabulary usage for clarity.

  • RevisedThis share significantly declined to 5% in the following decade.

    Improved word choice for better clarity and precision.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay adequately addresses the task by summarizing key trends and providing relevant comparisons. The main features of the graph are highlighted.

Suggestions

  • Ensure all figure details are accurate.
  • Focus on differing trends for deeper insight.

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