Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #40, band 7.0

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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
	Japan	US	China	India
1990	26	11	2	1
1995	20	8	3	1
2000	18	11	5	1
2005	18	8	11	5
2010	17	5	25	7
2012	17	7	28	5

Academic Task 1184 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph presents data on the proportion of Australian exports to four countries, namely Japan, the US, China, and India, between 1990 and 2012.

Lexical resource
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RevisedThe line graph illustrates the percentage of Australian exports to four countries—Japan, the US, China, and India—from 1990 to 2012.
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Overall, Australian exports to China and India increased, albeit different degrees, while those for the US and Japan decreased. Of particular note is the figure for China, which ranked the highest percentage across all the countries in question by the end of the timeframe.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, Australian exports to China and India increased to varying degrees, while those to the US and Japan decreased.
The revision improves clarity and flow.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedNotably, by the end of the timeframe, China had the highest percentage of Australian exports among the countries.
The revision enhances readability and coherence.

Looking specifically at the Australian exports to Asian countries, China, despite standing at a negligible 3% in the initial year, rose gradually until 2000, settling at 5%, before experiencing a sharp growth to 30% in 2012. In contrast, Japan started at approximately 27% in the commencing year, declined significantly to 20% over the next five years, after which it witnessed a steady decline to about 18% in the final year.

Lexical resource
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RevisedFocusing on Australian exports to Asian countries, China, which started at a mere 3% in 1990, rose gradually to 5% by 2000, then surged to 30% by 2012.
The revision uses more varied vocabulary and improves clarity.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedIn contrast, Japan's exports started at approximately 27% in 1990, declined to 20% over the next five years, and continued to decrease steadily to about 18% by 2012.
The revision clarifies the timeline and improves coherence.

The US, on the other hand, imported about 12% of Australian products in 1990, after seeing a sudden decrease over the years, it managed to retain 12% in a decade, followed by a gradual downward trend by the end of the period, hovering around 7%.

Lexical resource
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RevisedConversely, the US imported about 12% of Australian products in 1990. After a decrease, it stabilized at 12% for a decade before gradually declining to around 7% by 2012.
The revision enhances lexical variety and sentence structure.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is generally well-organized with clear paragraphing and logical progression of ideas. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.

Suggestions

Use more linking words to improve flow.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
Provide a brief summary at the end.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, Australian exports to China and India increased to varying degrees, while those to the US and Japan decreased.
The revision improves clarity and flow.
RevisedNotably, by the end of the timeframe, China had the highest percentage of Australian exports among the countries.
The revision enhances readability and coherence.
RevisedIn contrast, Japan's exports started at approximately 27% in 1990, declined to 20% over the next five years, and continued to decrease steadily to about 18% by 2012.
The revision clarifies the timeline and improves coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with some errors in complex sentences.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, Australian exports to China and India increased to varying degrees, while those to the US and Japan decreased.
The revision corrects the grammatical error in expression.
RevisedConversely, the US imported about 12% of Australian products in 1990. After a decrease, it stabilized at 12% for a decade before gradually declining to around 7% by 2012.
The revision corrects run-on sentences and improves clarity.
RevisedFocusing on Australian exports to Asian countries, China, which started at a mere 3% in 1990, rose gradually to 5% by 2000, then surged to 30% by 2012.
The revision corrects punctuation and improves sentence structure.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some variety and precision. However, there are opportunities to use more varied expressions.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedThe line graph illustrates the percentage of Australian exports to four countries—Japan, the US, China, and India—from 1990 to 2012.
The revision uses more precise vocabulary.
RevisedFocusing on Australian exports to Asian countries, China, which started at a mere 3% in 1990, rose gradually to 5% by 2000, then surged to 30% by 2012.
The revision uses more varied vocabulary and improves clarity.
RevisedConversely, the US imported about 12% of Australian products in 1990. After a decrease, it stabilized at 12% for a decade before gradually declining to around 7% by 2012.
The revision enhances lexical variety and sentence structure.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed comparisons.

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