Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #41, band 7.5

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Values in % of Australian exports. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.

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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
	Japan	US	China	India
1990	26	11	2	1
1995	20	8	3	1
2000	18	11	5	1
2005	18	8	11	5
2010	17	5	25	7
2012	17	7	28	5

Academic Task 1220 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph provides information about the proportion of Australian exports to four countries, namely Japan, the US, China, and India, between 1990 and 2012.

In terms of the overall export patterns, China and India imported Australian goods at an increasing trend, while the reverse is true for Japan and the US. Notably, Chinese import in the last year was the most dominant percentage across all the countries in question.

Lexical resource
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RevisedOverall, China and India showed an increasing trend in importing Australian goods, while Japan and the US showed a decreasing trend.
The revision improves clarity and conciseness.
Lexical resource
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RevisedNotably, Chinese imports in the final year accounted for the highest percentage among all the countries.
The revision clarifies the meaning and improves precision.

China, despite standing at about a negligible 3% in the initial year, ranked highest at an impressive 30% by the end of the timeframe, thanks to a substantial increase over the years. Similarly, India started at approximately 2%, experienced an upward trend from 1990 to 2010, reaching its peak of roughly 8%, followed by a slight decrease to about 6% in 2012.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedChina, which stood at about a negligible 3% in the initial year, rose to an impressive 30% by the end of the timeframe due to a substantial increase over the years.
The revision improves clarity and flow by restructuring the sentence.
Coherence & cohesion
Close revision note
RevisedSimilarly, India started at approximately 2% and experienced an upward trend from 1990 to 2010, reaching a peak of roughly 8%, before slightly decreasing to about 6% in 2012.
The revision enhances coherence by adding a conjunction to connect ideas smoothly.

In contrast, Japan and the US witnessed decreasing figures over the given period, albeit at differing degrees. Regarding Japanese imports, which stood out at about a remarkable 27% in the intial year, it saw a sharp decrease over the next five years, settling at 20%, followed by a steady decline to approximately 18% in the final year. Likewise, the US commenced at rougly 13% in 1990, managed to constitude the same quantity after a decade, despite experiencing a downward trend, and declined steadily to about 7% in 2012.

Coherence & cohesion
Close revision note
RevisedIn contrast, Japan and the US experienced decreasing figures over the given period, although at differing rates.
The revision improves coherence by using more precise language.
Lexical resource
Close revision note
RevisedJapanese imports, which were about 27% in the initial year, saw a sharp decrease over the next five years, settling at 20%, followed by a steady decline to approximately 18% in the final year.
The revision removes unnecessary words to improve clarity.
Lexical resource
Close revision note
RevisedSimilarly, the US started at roughly 13% in 1990, maintained this level after a decade despite a downward trend, and then declined steadily to about 7% in 2012.
The revision improves word choice and sentence structure.

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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphs and a good flow of information. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.

Suggestions

Use more linking words to improve the flow between sentences.
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedChina, which stood at about a negligible 3% in the initial year, rose to an impressive 30% by the end of the timeframe due to a substantial increase over the years.
The revision improves clarity and flow by restructuring the sentence.
RevisedSimilarly, India started at approximately 2% and experienced an upward trend from 1990 to 2010, reaching a peak of roughly 8%, before slightly decreasing to about 6% in 2012.
The revision enhances coherence by adding a conjunction to connect ideas smoothly.
RevisedIn contrast, Japan and the US experienced decreasing figures over the given period, although at differing rates.
The revision improves coherence by using more precise language.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, China and India showed an increasing trend in importing Australian goods, while Japan and the US showed a decreasing trend.
The revision corrects the use of 'at an increasing trend' to a more grammatically accurate expression.
RevisedSimilarly, the US started at roughly 13% in 1990, maintained this level after a decade despite a downward trend, and then declined steadily to about 7% in 2012.
The revision corrects spelling errors and improves grammatical accuracy.
RevisedJapanese imports, which were about 27% in the initial year, saw a sharp decrease over the next five years, settling at 20%, followed by a steady decline to approximately 18% in the final year.
The revision corrects a spelling error and improves sentence structure.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some word choices could be more precise.

Sentence revisions 4

RevisedNotably, Chinese imports in the final year accounted for the highest percentage among all the countries.
The revision clarifies the meaning and improves precision.
RevisedJapanese imports, which were about 27% in the initial year, saw a sharp decrease over the next five years, settling at 20%, followed by a steady decline to approximately 18% in the final year.
The revision removes unnecessary words to improve clarity.
RevisedSimilarly, the US started at roughly 13% in 1990, maintained this level after a decade despite a downward trend, and then declined steadily to about 7% in 2012.
The revision improves word choice and sentence structure.
RevisedOverall, China and India showed an increasing trend in importing Australian goods, while Japan and the US showed a decreasing trend.
The revision improves clarity and conciseness.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay addresses all parts of the task and provides a clear overview of the trends shown in the graph.

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