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Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #54, band 7.5

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The line graph this answer describes

Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199019952000200520102012
Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199020002010
Values in % of Australian exports. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
JapanUSChinaIndia
1990261121
199520831
2000181151
2005188115
2010175257
2012177285

Academic Task 1177 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.

  1. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe graph below illustrates the percentage of Australian exports to Japan, China, the USA, and India from 1990 to 2012.

    Using 'exports' instead of 'products transferred' is more precise.

Meanwhile, the percentage of the USA and India fluctuated without large changes.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, Japan was the main export partner of Australia at the beginning of the period; however, it declined gradually over the period.

    Using 'however' provides a clearer contrast.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedIn contrast, exports to China increased steadily, becoming the largest by the end of the period.

    Replacing 'transfer' with 'exports' is more accurate.

Despite some fluctuations between 1990 and 2000, the figure dropped from 10% to 5% by the end of the period.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedIn 1990, Japan imported approximately 25% of Australian products.

    Using 'approximately' is slightly more formal.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedHowever, this percentage experienced a steady decrease over the period, reaching under 20% in 2012.

    Changing 'has experienced' to 'experienced' maintains consistent past tense.

  3. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedFurthermore, the same trend occurred with the USA.

    Using 'occurred' instead of 'has happened' maintains past tense consistency.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn contrast, China's share increased steadily from around 2-3% to about 28% over the three decades, eventually becoming the largest Australian export partner among the four countries.

    Adding 'eventually' clarifies the sequence of events.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIndia's proportion showed a slight increase from around 1% to 8% until the mid-2000s, before falling to 5% by the end of the period.

    Adding 'by' clarifies the time frame.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is logically organized with clear paragraphing. However, some sentences could benefit from more explicit linking words to enhance cohesion.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to connect ideas.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Avoid abrupt transitions between ideas.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, Japan was the main export partner of Australia at the beginning of the period; however, it declined gradually over the period.

    Using 'however' provides a clearer contrast.

  • RevisedIn contrast, China's share increased steadily from around 2-3% to about 28% over the three decades, eventually becoming the largest Australian export partner among the four countries.

    Adding 'eventually' clarifies the sequence of events.

  • RevisedIndia's proportion showed a slight increase from around 1% to 8% until the mid-2000s, before falling to 5% by the end of the period.

    Adding 'by' clarifies the time frame.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedIn 1990, Japan imported approximately 25% of Australian products.

    Using 'approximately' is slightly more formal.

  • RevisedHowever, this percentage experienced a steady decrease over the period, reaching under 20% in 2012.

    Changing 'has experienced' to 'experienced' maintains consistent past tense.

  • RevisedFurthermore, the same trend occurred with the USA.

    Using 'occurred' instead of 'has happened' maintains past tense consistency.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, but there is room for more varied expressions.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe graph below illustrates the percentage of Australian exports to Japan, China, the USA, and India from 1990 to 2012.

    Using 'exports' instead of 'products transferred' is more precise.

  • RevisedIn contrast, exports to China increased steadily, becoming the largest by the end of the period.

    Replacing 'transfer' with 'exports' is more accurate.

  • RevisedIndia's share showed a slight increase from around 1% to 8% until the mid-2000s, before falling to 5% by the end of the period.

    Using 'share' instead of 'proportion' provides variety.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task effectively, covering all key trends and data points.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data points for clarity.
  • Ensure all trends are clearly highlighted.

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