Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #42, band 7.0
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| Japan | US | China | India | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 1990 | 26 | 11 | 2 | 1 |
| 1995 | 20 | 8 | 3 | 1 |
| 2000 | 18 | 11 | 5 | 1 |
| 2005 | 18 | 8 | 11 | 5 |
| 2010 | 17 | 5 | 25 | 7 |
| 2012 | 17 | 7 | 28 | 5 |
Academic Task 1268 words
The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart compares four countries in terms of Australian exports between 1990 and 2012.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOverall, while Australian exports to Japan and the US decreased, the reverse trend was observed for China and India.
Corrected capitalization error and improved sentence flow.
Lexical resource
RevisedMoreover, despite a decrease in export rate, Japan remained Australia's largest export partner for most of the period.
Improved word choice and sentence clarity.
Focusing on the increases first, in 1990, Australia exported less than 5% to China and India. However, the figure for China rose gradually to 5% in 2000, before a dramatic growth to about 27% in the final year, becoming the biggest Australian partner.
Lexical resource
RevisedAustralian exports to India, on the other hand, rose steadily until 2005, reaching roughly 5%, before experiencing a significant rise to around 8% in 2009.
Corrected adverb form and improved word choice.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 2012, however, the figure for India declined again to roughly 5%.
Improved sentence flow by repositioning 'however'.
In contrast, initially, the figure for the US was around 12%, then the proportion of Australian exports to the US plummeted to 7% in 1995, before a sharp rise to 13% in 2000.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedJapan and the US, however, bucked the trend.
Added 'however' to clarify contrast with previous information.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedStarting at 25% in 1990, Australian exports to Japan experienced minimal growth, increasing by one percentage point the following year.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
Lexical resource
RevisedBetween 1991 and 2004, there was a notable drop, with figures plummeting to nearly 15% in 2004.
Simplified sentence structure for clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn the following year, Australian exports to Japan increased to 18%, followed by further growth to 20% around 2008.
Improved sentence flow and clarity.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedBy 2012, the figures had slightly dropped again, resulting in an export rate of 18%.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
Lexical resource
RevisedAfter that, the figure for the US decreased steadily, plummeting to about 5% in 2012.
Corrected adverb form.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear structure. Transitions between points are mostly smooth, but some areas could benefit from clearer linkage.
Suggestions
- Use more varied linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, while Australian exports to Japan and the US decreased, the reverse trend was observed for China and India.
Corrected capitalization error and improved sentence flow.
RevisedIn 2012, however, the figure for India declined again to roughly 5%.
Improved sentence flow by repositioning 'however'.
RevisedJapan and the US, however, bucked the trend.
Added 'however' to clarify contrast with previous information.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with some errors in complex sentences.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedStarting at 25% in 1990, Australian exports to Japan experienced minimal growth, increasing by one percentage point the following year.
Improved sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedBy 2012, the figures had slightly dropped again, resulting in an export rate of 18%.
Improved sentence structure and clarity.
RevisedIn the following year, Australian exports to Japan increased to 18%, followed by further growth to 20% around 2008.
Improved sentence flow and clarity.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary with some precision. There are occasional errors in word choice or form.
Sentence revisions 4
RevisedMoreover, despite a decrease in export rate, Japan remained Australia's largest export partner for most of the period.
Improved word choice and sentence clarity.
RevisedAustralian exports to India, on the other hand, rose steadily until 2005, reaching roughly 5%, before experiencing a significant rise to around 8% in 2009.
Corrected adverb form and improved word choice.
RevisedBetween 1991 and 2004, there was a notable drop, with figures plummeting to nearly 15% in 2004.
Simplified sentence structure for clarity.
RevisedAfter that, the figure for the US decreased steadily, plummeting to about 5% in 2012.
Corrected adverb form.
Task achievement
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay effectively addresses the task, summarizing and comparing the main features of the graph.
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