Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #29, band 6.5

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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
	Japan	US	China	India
1990	26	11	2	1
1995	20	8	3	1
2000	18	11	5	1
2005	18	8	11	5
2010	17	5	25	7
2012	17	7	28	5

Academic Task 1199 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph provides information about the proportion of exports of Australia to Japan, the US, China and India between 1990 and 2012. Overall, it is clear that while exports to China and India saw an increase, the reverse is true for Japan and the US. Looking into details, regarding China, the proportion of exports started at around 3% in 1990. The figure for China increased gradually to approximately 13% in 2005 before reaching a peak of roughly 26% in 2012. Australian exports to India rose slightly from around 2% in 1995 to 8% in 2010. Then, it declined to 5% in the final year. However, the most of exports went to Japan compared to other countries at 25% in the beginning of the period. The percentage experienced a gradual drop until 2005 with some fluctuations ,about 17%. Despite this decline, it grew to 2012 along with variations approximately 10%.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, exports to China and India increased, whereas those to Japan and the US decreased.
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Lexical resource
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RevisedExports to China rose steadily to about 13% in 2005 and peaked at around 26% in 2012.
Improved lexical choice for clarity.
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RevisedExports to India increased slightly from about 2% in 1995 to 8% in 2010.
Rephrased for lexical variety.
Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedIt then declined to 5% in the final year.
Improved sentence structure for grammatical accuracy.
Grammar & accuracy
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RevisedThe percentage gradually dropped to about 17% by 2005, with some fluctuations.
Corrected punctuation and improved sentence clarity.
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RevisedDespite this decline, it grew to approximately 10% by 2012, with some fluctuations.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

When it comes to exports of Australia to the US, it began at around 11% which witnessed a decrease till 1995. The proportion for this increased dramatically during the following 5 years, at 13%. However, this rate dropped significantly to 2010 and ended at just about 5% in 2012.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedExports to the US began at around 11% and decreased until 1995.
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Lexical resource
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RevisedThis proportion rose sharply over the next five years, reaching 13%.
Enhanced lexical precision and variety.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay is generally well-organized but lacks some clarity in the progression of ideas.

Suggestions

Use clearer paragraphing to separate different countries' data.
Ensure logical flow between sentences and ideas.
Use linking words to better connect ideas.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, exports to China and India increased, whereas those to Japan and the US decreased.
Simplified the sentence for clarity and coherence.
RevisedIn 1990, exports to China were around 3%.
Rephrased for clarity and conciseness.
RevisedExports to the US began at around 11% and decreased until 1995.
Simplified the sentence structure for better coherence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures with some grammatical errors.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedDespite this decline, it grew to approximately 10% by 2012, with some fluctuations.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.
RevisedThe percentage gradually dropped to about 17% by 2005, with some fluctuations.
Corrected punctuation and improved sentence clarity.
RevisedIt then declined to 5% in the final year.
Improved sentence structure for grammatical accuracy.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary with some precision, but there are occasional inaccuracies.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedExports to China rose steadily to about 13% in 2005 and peaked at around 26% in 2012.
Improved lexical choice for clarity.
RevisedExports to India increased slightly from about 2% in 1995 to 8% in 2010.
Rephrased for lexical variety.
RevisedThis proportion rose sharply over the next five years, reaching 13%.
Enhanced lexical precision and variety.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and includes relevant data, but some details are inaccurately reported.

Suggestions

Ensure data is accurately represented from the graph.
Include more comparisons between countries.
Clarify any ambiguous statements.

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