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Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #28, band 6.5

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198 words. Marked by Axiom on 30 March 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The line graph this answer describes

Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199019952000200520102012
Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199020002010
Values in % of Australian exports. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
JapanUSChinaIndia
1990261121
199520831
2000181151
2005188115
2010175257
2012177285

Academic Task 1198 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to four countries from 1990 to 2012.

The line graph illustrates information about the proportion of exportation of Australia across four different countries from 1990 to 2012. Moreover, Japan led the pack up until China’s export shares rose in the final year.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, export rates to China and India increased, albeit at varying rates; conversely, Japan and the US experienced a decline.

    The use of 'conversely' improves the contrast between the two trends.

China’s share started at 3% in 1990, the figure that then increased to a whopping 27% in the final year, before which it held steadily at 4% by 2000.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedBoth China and India exhibited upward trends throughout the period.

    The revised sentence provides a clearer connection between the two countries.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedIndia’s proportion was the lowest, rising from 2% to just 5% in 2012, maintaining a relatively stable position.

    The revision improves vocabulary choice and clarity.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn contrast, Japan and the US displayed different patterns.

    The revision improves clarity and coherence by using 'displayed' to describe the patterns.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedJapan was the leading destination for Australian exports at 25% in 1990, but its share dropped to just over 15%, fluctuating before settling at 18%.

    The revision enhances clarity and variety in vocabulary.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedThe US was the second-largest recipient of Australian exports, starting at around 12%, decreasing by 5 percentage points before recovering to 13%.

    The revision corrects the sentence structure for clarity.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedFrom 2000, it experienced a consistent decline, with minor fluctuations, ending at 6% in 2012.

    The revision improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

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Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear linking between ideas.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to connect ideas.
  • Improve paragraph transitions.
  • Clarify comparisons between countries.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, export rates to China and India increased, albeit at varying rates; conversely, Japan and the US experienced a decline.

    The use of 'conversely' improves the contrast between the two trends.

  • RevisedBoth China and India exhibited upward trends throughout the period.

    The revised sentence provides a clearer connection between the two countries.

  • RevisedIn contrast, Japan and the US displayed different patterns.

    The revision improves clarity and coherence by using 'displayed' to describe the patterns.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures but contains some errors.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedChina and India exhibited upward trends throughout the period.

    The revision corrects the verb choice to better fit the context.

  • RevisedThe US was the second-largest recipient of Australian exports, starting at around 12%, decreasing by 5 percentage points before recovering to 13%.

    The revision corrects the sentence structure for clarity.

  • RevisedFrom 2000, it experienced a consistent decline, with minor fluctuations, ending at 6% in 2012.

    The revision improves grammatical accuracy and clarity.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some expressions are repetitive.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedChina’s share began at 3% in 1990 and surged to 27% by the final year.

    The revised sentence uses 'began' and 'surged' to avoid repetition and enhance clarity.

  • RevisedIndia’s proportion was the lowest, rising from 2% to just 5% in 2012, maintaining a relatively stable position.

    The revision improves vocabulary choice and clarity.

  • RevisedJapan was the leading destination for Australian exports at 25% in 1990, but its share dropped to just over 15%, fluctuating before settling at 18%.

    The revision enhances clarity and variety in vocabulary.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and presents an overview, but some details are inaccurately represented.

Suggestions

  • Ensure accuracy in data representation.
  • Provide more specific data points for clarity.

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