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Australian exports to four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #57, band 6.5

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207 words. Marked by Axiom on 17 February 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The line graph this answer describes

Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199019952000200520102012
Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph)Japan, US, China, India for 1990, 1995, 2000, 2005, 2010, 2012, in % of Australian exports. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.0102030199020002010
Values in % of Australian exports. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Australian exports to four countries (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (% of Australian exports)
JapanUSChinaIndia
1990261121
199520831
2000181151
2005188115
2010175257
2012177285

Academic Task 1207 words

The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012.

The line graph shows the percentage of Australian exports to Japan, the US, China, and India between 1990 and 2012.

Overall, what can be seen from the graph is that exports to China and India experienced an upward trend, while exports to Japan and the US declined. Notably, China accounted for the highest proportion by the end of the period.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedBeginning at around 2% in 1990, both India and China exhibited a steady upward trend. From 2000, China's growth accelerated, reaching a peak of approximately 30% in 2012.

    The sentence was complex and needed to be split for clarity.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedFurthermore, India's exports showed a continuous increase to 8% but ended slightly lower at 7%.

    The word 'Moreover' was replaced with 'Furthermore' for variety and clarity.

From 1995, Japan had fallen steadily throughout the period. After rebounding from a previous drop, the US increased by 5% again in 2000.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedTurning to Japan, it started at 28% at the beginning of the period and decreased rapidly by 8% within the first five years.

    The sentence was restructured for clarity and conciseness.

  2. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe US started at about 13% and experienced a prolonged decline, dropping by 5% in 1995.

    The sentence was rephrased for clarity and to avoid sentence fragments.

  3. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedThereafter, exports to the US fell steadily until 2010.

    Removed the definite article 'the' for grammatical accuracy.

  4. Lexical resource

    RevisedBy the end of the period, the US exhibited renewed growth, reaching approximately 7%.

    The sentence was rephrased for clarity and to avoid awkward phrasing.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical sequence, but some sentences lack clarity and coherence. Transitions between ideas are present but could be improved for smoother flow.

Suggestions

  • Use clearer transitions between paragraphs.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
  • Avoid abrupt shifts in topics.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedBeginning at around 2% in 1990, both India and China exhibited a steady upward trend. From 2000, China's growth accelerated, reaching a peak of approximately 30% in 2012.

    The sentence was complex and needed to be split for clarity.

  • RevisedTurning to Japan, it started at 28% at the beginning of the period and decreased rapidly by 8% within the first five years.

    The sentence was restructured for clarity and conciseness.

  • RevisedThe US started at about 13% and experienced a prolonged decline, dropping by 5% in 1995.

    The sentence was rephrased for clarity and to avoid sentence fragments.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures, but there are errors in tense and sentence structure.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedJapan decreased rapidly by 8% within the first five years.

    The past perfect tense was unnecessary and was corrected to simple past.

  • RevisedThe US exports increased by 5% again in 2000.

    Clarified the subject to avoid ambiguity.

  • RevisedThereafter, exports to the US fell steadily until 2010.

    Removed the definite article 'the' for grammatical accuracy.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriately, though some word choices are awkward or repetitive.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedIndia's exports increased continuously to 8% but ended slightly lower at 7% by the end of the period.

    The sentence was rephrased to avoid awkward phrasing.

  • RevisedFurthermore, India's exports showed a continuous increase to 8% but ended slightly lower at 7%.

    The word 'Moreover' was replaced with 'Furthermore' for variety and clarity.

  • RevisedBy the end of the period, the US exhibited renewed growth, reaching approximately 7%.

    The sentence was rephrased for clarity and to avoid awkward phrasing.

Task achievement

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task and includes key features of the graph, but there are inaccuracies in data interpretation.

Suggestions

  • Ensure accurate interpretation of data.
  • Include all relevant data points.
  • Avoid misrepresenting trends.

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