University or a job after school: IELTS Task 2 essay #24, band 7.5
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Task 2415 words
Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others think that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some believe that if people get a higher education, there is a bigger chance of career opportunities, while others believe people should find a job right after graduating from school. I think finding a job after school might bring benefits—real-life practice and getting more experience—but it cannot outweigh the benefits of getting a job after graduating school.
As a result, undergraduates will be ready to get a job without any training thanks to their university education. This will help students to learn what kind of responsibility and hard work is expected from them before working as a professional.
Lexical resource
RevisedUniversity education always equips people with the skills to handle various problems, providing real-life experiences and theories, so students can gain more insights before entering the job market.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective word choice.
Lexical resource
RevisedAdditionally, some universities emphasize practical learning opportunities alongside theoretical education, allowing students to apply what they have learned in a real-world setting.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective word choice.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedFor example, in Uzbekistan, many universities that specialize in teacher training send their students to local schools, allowing them to learn from other teachers and gain practical experience.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the sentence.
These days, many jobs make an agreement with universities to get more workers, so the students will be able to get a job straight after graduating college.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedAnother advantage that further reinforces the former is the collaboration between universities and the job market.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the sentence.
Lexical resource
RevisedFurthermore, some students who receive scholarships are required to work in organizations related to their field of study for 3 to 4 years.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective word choice.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedConsequently, students will be more efficient in their job search and preparation for interviews.
The revision provides a more formal and varied phrasing.
Until students who are studying at university graduate, those who started their jobs earlier will get more experience, resulting in more companies being interested in them, as they have more skills and experiences that make them outshine others.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, there might be some advantages to gaining work experience immediately after completing school.
This revision provides a more specific and varied linking word.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedThe main advantage is real-life experience, as students will have the opportunity to train in a practical manner, allowing them to save time and immediately start honing their skills.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the sentence structure.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedAdditionally, another benefit is the opportunity to accrue more professional experience.
The revision provides a more formal and varied phrasing.
In conclusion, although the benefits of starting a job have their perks, such as real-life practice and being able to get more experience than others, I believe finding a job after graduating university is better because students will be fully prepared, and they will not spend time searching for jobs.
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What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. Cohesive devices are used effectively to link ideas within and between paragraphs, ensuring a smooth flow of information.
Suggestions
- Try to vary your linking words to avoid repetition and to show a wider range of vocabulary.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedHowever, there might be some advantages to gaining work experience immediately after completing school.
This revision provides a more specific and varied linking word.
RevisedAdditionally, another benefit is the opportunity to accrue more professional experience.
The revision provides a more formal and varied phrasing.
RevisedConsequently, students will be more efficient in their job search and preparation for interviews.
The revision provides a more formal and varied phrasing.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. The majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few minor errors.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe main advantage is real-life experience, as students will have the opportunity to train in a practical manner, allowing them to save time and immediately start honing their skills.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the sentence structure.
RevisedFor example, in Uzbekistan, many universities that specialize in teacher training send their students to local schools, allowing them to learn from other teachers and gain practical experience.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the sentence.
RevisedAnother advantage that further reinforces the former is the collaboration between universities and the job market.
The revision corrects the awkward phrasing and improves the clarity of the sentence.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedUniversity education always equips people with the skills to handle various problems, providing real-life experiences and theories, so students can gain more insights before entering the job market.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective word choice.
RevisedAdditionally, some universities emphasize practical learning opportunities alongside theoretical education, allowing students to apply what they have learned in a real-world setting.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective word choice.
RevisedFurthermore, some students who receive scholarships are required to work in organizations related to their field of study for 3 to 4 years.
The revision provides a more accurate and effective word choice.
Task response
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. Both sides of the argument are discussed in detail. The conclusion clearly restates the writer's position.
Suggestions
- Make sure to fully explain and support your point of view.
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