A new international language: IELTS Task 2 essay #25, band 5.5
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228 words. Marked by Axiom on 29 January 2026. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
Task 2228 words
Some people think that we should invent a new language for international communication. Will the benefits of this outweigh the problems associated with it?
Introduction:
some people think that we should create a single global language for international communaction.Will the benefits are greater than drawbacks.
Body 1:
At the moment,many people face problems such as knowledge due to language differences.For example,if scientis creat add language many people would be learn this language and build new school and fresh course.I think it's become easier.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOne main advantage of creating a global language is that it would create a new global language.
The sentence is confusing and repetitive. It should be revised for clarity and proper use of language.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedI believe it would be more beneficial for people, as it would enable individuals to learn a new language and thus expand their knowledge and development.
The original sentence is confusing and not well-structured. The revision provides a clear and concise version of the idea.
Lexical resource
RevisedThis is because people from different countries would be able to learn new languages and expand their knowledge.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling error and awkward phrasing, making the meaning clearer.
Lexical resource
RevisedAs a result, both junior and senior people would be able to improve their knowledge.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and collocation, making the meaning clearer.
Body 2:
One major issue is that some people's thinking negative and this language where come from who create this langauge.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedHowever, creating a new global language could also cause several problems.
The revised sentence provides a smoother transition and better cohesion with the following ideas.
This would be difficult because that wouldn't be develop.For example if new language enter countries,people own forget mother language and much money and any time spend is that.As a result,this language will be improve,but one day people will forget this global language.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn conclusion, although the creation of a new international language may present certain challenges, such as the potential for people to forget their mother tongue and the significant investment of time and money, I believe that the benefits would outweigh these problems.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a clearer and more formal expression of the writer's opinion.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a basic structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or lacking, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and clearly stating the writer's opinion.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and clearly state your opinion.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOne main advantage of creating a global language is that it would create a new global language.
The sentence is confusing and repetitive. It should be revised for clarity and proper use of language.
RevisedI believe it would be more beneficial for people, as it would enable individuals to learn a new language and thus expand their knowledge and development.
The original sentence is confusing and not well-structured. The revision provides a clear and concise version of the idea.
RevisedHowever, creating a new global language could also cause several problems.
The revised sentence provides a smoother transition and better cohesion with the following ideas.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 5.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar, punctuation and spelling. However, these errors do not generally impede communication. The essay contains several grammatical errors that affect the overall clarity and readability. These include issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and preposition use. For example, "creat new global language" should be "create a new global language," and "much money and any time spend is that" is unclear and awkward. Additionally, there are some punctuation and spacing errors that affect the overall professionalism of the writing.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOne main advantage of creating a global language is that it will create a new global language.
The revised sentence corrects the repeated phrase.
RevisedI think it would be beneficial for people, as it would allow children to learn a new language and thus contribute to the development of their countries.
The revised sentence corrects the grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, making the meaning clearer.
RevisedIn conclusion, although the creation of a new international language may present certain challenges, such as the potential for people to forget their mother tongue and the significant investment of time and money, I believe that the benefits would outweigh these problems.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and provides a clearer and more formal expression of the writer's opinion.
Lexical resource
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of vocabulary, but there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, "junior boys" could be more appropriately referred to as "young boys" or "children," and "fresh lesson" should be "new lessons." Additionally, there are some instances of awkward or incorrect phrasing that detract from the overall clarity and effectiveness of the writing.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOne main advantage of creating a global language is that it would create a new global language.
The revised sentence corrects the repeated phrase.
RevisedThis is because people from different countries would be able to learn new languages and expand their knowledge.
The revised sentence corrects the spelling error and awkward phrasing, making the meaning clearer.
RevisedAs a result, both junior and senior people would be able to improve their knowledge.
The revised sentence corrects the awkward phrasing and collocation, making the meaning clearer.
Task response
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay addresses the task and provides a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the potential benefits and drawbacks of creating a new global language for international communication. The writer presents a clear position that the benefits of such a language may outweigh the drawbacks, but this position could be more fully developed with a more detailed exploration of potential benefits and drawbacks. Additionally, the conclusion could be strengthened by summarizing the main points and clearly restating the writer's position.
Suggestions
- Ensure that your argument is fully developed and supported with specific examples.
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