A new international language: IELTS Task 2 essay #24, band 8.0

Inventing a new language is suggested to communicate internationally. While to some extent people would benefit from this change, I believe the drawbacks are more significant.

One primary advantage of using one language across the world is that it helps prevent language barriers. This is, when all people communicate using one language, misunderstandings are less likely to occur, allowing the flow of conversation to be understandable and uninterrupted, especially in international negotiations, business settings, and educational researches. Another minor yet obvious positive change would be the increased availability of international job opportunities for ordinary individuals. Oftentimes, in developing countries, people with great knowledge and expertise in certain fields, like engineering and construction to name but a few, are unable to get jobs due to language barriers in other countries. If there were for one single language, people would be able to make greater international contributions by sharing their knowledge and skills. Therefore, using one language use worldwide would be beneficial for all societies as a whole.

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   RevisedOne primary advantage of a common global language is that it helps prevent language barriers.

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   RevisedThis would reduce misunderstandings and allow for a smoother flow of conversation, particularly in international negotiations, business settings, and educational research.

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   RevisedTherefore, the use of a single global language could be beneficial for societies as a whole.

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These benefits notwithstanding, I would argue that this initiative could cause more major problems, one of which is the loss of cultural identity. In other words, while communicating in one language will help prevent social misunderstandings, it would lead the disappearance of many national languages, thereby threatening the existence of nations since language is the most important aspect distinguishing one nation from others. Secondly, it would be a major reason for the rise of unemployment rates in certain industries like education. Take my country Uzbekistan as an example. Each year, thousands of students graduate from universities with degrees in teaching major languages such as English, Russian, and Chinese, so using one language across the globe means that individuals like these students will become unemployed, worsening the financial burdens on each nation. Given that, this change in communication will prove more disadvantageous.

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   RevisedHowever, I would argue that the initiative could lead to more significant problems, such as the loss of cultural identity.

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   RevisedIn other words, while a common language could help prevent social misunderstandings, it could also lead to the disappearance of many national languages, thereby threatening the concept of a nation, as language is a key aspect that distinguishes one nation from another.

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   RevisedSecondly, it could potentially lead to an increase in unemployment rates in certain industries, such as education.

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   RevisedEach year, thousands of students graduate from with degrees in languages like English, Russian, and Chinese may face unemployment due to a global adoption of a single language, thereby increasing the financial burden on their nations.

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   RevisedGiven these factors, the proposed change in communication may prove to be more disadvantageous.

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In conclusion, despite the benefits – prevention of language barrier and the possibility of increased international job prospects, it is in my opinion that the creation of one language for all countries to use in communication will cause more such problems as the loss of cultural identity and a boom in unemployment rates.