Visitors to three areas: IELTS Task 1 answer #35, band 5.5

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Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand visitors)
	The coast	The mountains	The lakes
1987	40	20	10
1992	35	25	25
1997	48	30	40
2002	62	31	75
2007	75	35	50

Academic Task 1162 words

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

The line graph illustrates how many overseas people visited the coast, mountains and lakes in a European country over a 20-year period from 1987 to 2007.

Overall, it is clear that during the whole period the coast was the most popular place while the lakes witnessed a signicant rise to the end of 2002 year.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedOverall, it is clear that during the whole period, the coast was the most popular place, while the lakes witnessed a significant rise until the end of 2002.
Added a comma for better readability and corrected 'signicant' to 'significant'.

In the beginning of the 1987 the lakes had the least visitors for 10.000, however, this steeply increased to over 70.000. When it comes to the mountains, basically, remained unchanged, although they grew close to 35 thousands in 2007.

Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedAt the beginning of 1987, the lakes had the fewest visitors, at 10,000; however, this number steeply increased to over 70,000.
Improved clarity by restructuring the sentence and corrected punctuation.
Coherence & cohesion
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RevisedThe number of visitors to the mountains remained relatively unchanged, although it grew to nearly 35,000 by 2007.
Clarified the sentence structure and corrected 'thousands' to 'thousand'.

Apparently, the coast was the most visited place with 40.000 visitors and from 1992 till the end of the period it experienced a gradual growth by 35 thousands and still was the most visited country by a number of people. In contrast to the lakes, the coast is slightly higher for 30.000 visitors, however, those were opposite during a 10-year period for a little difference about 20.000 people.

Lexical resource
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RevisedIn contrast to the lakes, the coast had slightly more visitors, with a difference of 30,000; however, during a 10-year period, this difference was about 20,000.
Clarified the sentence and improved lexical choice.

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Coherence & cohesion

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and some transitions.

Suggestions

Use clear paragraphing to separate different points.
Improve transitions between sentences and ideas.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, it is clear that during the whole period, the coast was the most popular place, while the lakes witnessed a significant rise until the end of 2002.
Added a comma for better readability and corrected 'signicant' to 'significant'.
RevisedAt the beginning of 1987, the lakes had the fewest visitors, at 10,000; however, this number steeply increased to over 70,000.
Improved clarity by restructuring the sentence and corrected punctuation.
RevisedThe number of visitors to the mountains remained relatively unchanged, although it grew to nearly 35,000 by 2007.
Clarified the sentence structure and corrected 'thousands' to 'thousand'.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedOverall, it is clear that during the whole period, the coast was the most popular place, while the lakes witnessed a significant rise until the end of 2002.
Corrected 'signicant' to 'significant' and improved sentence structure.
RevisedThe number of visitors to the mountains remained relatively unchanged, although it grew to nearly 35,000 by 2007.
Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence clarity.
RevisedIn contrast to the lakes, the coast had slightly more visitors, with a difference of 30,000; however, during a 10-year period, this difference was about 20,000.
Improved grammatical accuracy and sentence structure.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary but includes some inaccuracies and repetitions.

Sentence revisions 3

RevisedAt the beginning of 1987, the lakes had the fewest visitors, at 10,000; however, this number steeply increased to over 70,000.
Replaced 'least' with 'fewest' for accuracy and corrected number formatting.
RevisedApparently, the coast was the most visited place with 40,000 visitors, and from 1992 until the end of the period, it experienced a gradual growth of 35,000, remaining the most visited area.
Improved lexical choice and corrected number formatting.
RevisedIn contrast to the lakes, the coast had slightly more visitors, with a difference of 30,000; however, during a 10-year period, this difference was about 20,000.
Clarified the sentence and improved lexical choice.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some inaccuracies are present.

Suggestions

Provide more detailed analysis of the data.
Ensure accuracy in reporting figures and trends.

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