axiom

Visitors to three areas: IELTS Task 1 answer #34, band 5.5

A student’s answer to this repeated IELTS question, shared without their name and marked by Axiom on the four criteria. Select a highlighted passage to see how it could be revised, and why.

134 words. Marked by Axiom on 9 July 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

The line graph this answer describes

Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph)The coast, The mountains, The lakes for 1987, 1992, 1997, 2002, 2007, in thousand visitors. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.02040608019871992199720022007
Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph)The coast, The mountains, The lakes for 1987, 1992, 1997, 2002, 2007, in thousand visitors. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.02040608019871992199720022007
Values in thousand visitors. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
Show the data
Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand visitors)
The coastThe mountainsThe lakes
1987402010
1992352525
1997483040
2002623175
2007753550

Academic Task 1134 words

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

The line graph illustrates how many overseas people visited the coast, mountains and lakes in a European country over a 10-year period from 1987 to 2007.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOverall, the coast remained the most popular destination throughout the period, while the lakes saw a significant rise until 2002.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity and removed unnecessary words.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn 1987, the lakes had the fewest visitors at 10,000, but this number steeply increased to over 70,000 by 2002.

    Clarified the timeline and corrected the numerical format.

  2. Lexical resource

    RevisedThe number of visitors to the mountains remained relatively stable, reaching nearly 35,000 in 2007.

    Removed informal language and improved precision.

Apparently, the coast was the most visited place with 40.000 visitors and from 1992 till the end of the period it experienced a gradual growth by 35 thousands and still was the most visited country by a number of people.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.

Suggestions

  • Use clear paragraphing to separate different sections of the analysis.
  • Include linking words to improve the flow between sentences.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedOverall, the coast remained the most popular destination throughout the period, while the lakes saw a significant rise until 2002.

    Simplified the sentence for clarity and removed unnecessary words.

  • RevisedIn 1987, the lakes had the fewest visitors at 10,000, but this number steeply increased to over 70,000 by 2002.

    Clarified the timeline and corrected the numerical format.

  • RevisedThe coast was the most visited area with 40,000 visitors in 1987, experiencing a gradual increase to 75,000 by 2007, maintaining its popularity.

    Corrected numerical format and improved sentence structure for clarity.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 5.0/ 9

The essay contains several grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedIn 1987, the lakes had the fewest visitors at 10,000; however, this number increased steeply to over 70,000.

    Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

  • RevisedThe number of visitors to the mountains remained relatively unchanged, reaching close to 35,000 in 2007.

    Improved grammatical accuracy and sentence clarity.

  • RevisedThe coast was the most visited area with 40,000 visitors in 1987, experiencing a gradual increase to 75,000 by 2007, maintaining its popularity.

    Corrected grammatical errors and improved sentence structure.

Lexical resource

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary but includes some inaccuracies and repetition.

Sentence revisions 4

  • RevisedOverall, the coast was consistently the most popular area, while the lakes experienced a notable increase until 2002.

    Replaced 'place' with 'area' for precision and corrected spelling error.

  • RevisedThe number of visitors to the mountains remained relatively stable, reaching nearly 35,000 in 2007.

    Removed informal language and improved precision.

  • RevisedThe coast, initially visited by 40,000 people, saw a steady increase of 35,000 visitors by the end of the period, remaining the most popular destination.

    Improved vocabulary choice and corrected numerical format.

  • RevisedIn 1987, the lakes had the fewest visitors at 10,000; however, this number increased steeply to over 70,000.

    Corrected numerical format and improved sentence structure.

Task achievement

Band 6.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and contains inaccuracies.

Suggestions

  • Provide more detailed analysis of trends.
  • Ensure accuracy in data representation.
  • Include more specific comparisons between the areas.

Check your own answer on this question

Write your answer and Axiom marks it the same way: a band for each criterion, and revisions for your own sentences. How the Task 1 checker works.

Check an essay free