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Visitors to three areas: IELTS Task 1 answer #40, band 7.5

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218 words. Marked by Axiom on 5 August 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

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Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph)The coast, The mountains, The lakes for 1987, 1992, 1997, 2002, 2007, in thousand visitors. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.02040608019871992199720022007
Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph)The coast, The mountains, The lakes for 1987, 1992, 1997, 2002, 2007, in thousand visitors. Values are approximate, read from the original chart.02040608019871992199720022007
Values in thousand visitors. Values approximate: read from the original chart, not printed on it.
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Visitors to three areas (IELTS Task 1 line graph) (thousand visitors)
The coastThe mountainsThe lakes
1987402010
1992352525
1997483040
2002623175
2007753550

Academic Task 1218 words

The graph below shows the number of overseas visiors to three different areas in an European country between 1987 and 2007.

The line graph provides information on the number of foreign tourists to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007.

Overall, the number of people visiting these places has increased. It is in these 20 years that the number of visitors to the lake has experienced the greatest increase. In the first 5 years, fewer people started visiting the coast, but later the number of visitors increased sharply.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedThe number of tourists to the mountains increased slowly, whereas the number of visitors to the lake experienced a dramatic rise.

    This revision connects the ideas more clearly, showing contrast.

But in the next 5 years, the number of visitors decreased slightly by 30 thousand people. The most visitors came to the coast in 2007, with 70,000 tourists. In 1987, the second most visited place was the mountain. This year 20 thousand people visited this place.

  1. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedIn 1987, the coast was the most popular area among tourists.

    The revision clarifies the sentence structure and meaning.

  2. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedIn that year, 40,000 people visited the coast.

    The revision corrects the number format and clarifies the sentence.

  3. Lexical resource

    RevisedVisitor numbers surged significantly from 1992 onwards.

    'Surged significantly' provides a stronger lexical choice.

  4. Coherence & cohesion

    RevisedOver the 20-year period, the number of visitors to the mountains grew slightly.

    This revision clarifies the time frame and the subject of the sentence.

In 1987, the rarely visited area was a lake with 10 thousand visitors. The number of visitors grew steadily until 1997. This year 75 thousand people visited this place. But by 2007, the number of these people had decreased.

  1. Grammar & accuracy

    RevisedHowever, the number of visitors to the lake increased dramatically, reaching its peak in 2002.

    The revision improves sentence structure and clarity.

Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.

Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.

What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.

Coherence & cohesion

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay is generally well-organized with a clear overview and logical progression of ideas. However, some sentences could be better connected for improved flow.

Suggestions

  • Use more linking words to connect ideas.
  • Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
  • Improve transitions between sentences.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe number of tourists to the mountains increased slowly, whereas the number of visitors to the lake experienced a dramatic rise.

    This revision connects the ideas more clearly, showing contrast.

  • RevisedIn 1987, the coast was the most popular area among tourists.

    The revision clarifies the sentence structure and meaning.

  • RevisedOver the 20-year period, the number of visitors to the mountains grew slightly.

    This revision clarifies the time frame and the subject of the sentence.

Grammar & accuracy

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor errors that do not impede communication.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedIn that year, 40,000 people visited the coast.

    The revision corrects the number format and clarifies the sentence.

  • RevisedHowever, the number of visitors to the lake increased dramatically, reaching its peak in 2002.

    The revision improves sentence structure and clarity.

  • RevisedThe number of visitors has risen dramatically since 1992, particularly to the coast.

    The revision adds specificity to the sentence.

Lexical resource

Band 7.0/ 9

The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for the task, but some expressions are repetitive or unclear.

Sentence revisions 3

  • RevisedThe number of visitors increased marginally over the 20-year period.

    'Increased marginally' is a more precise expression.

  • RevisedVisitor numbers surged significantly from 1992 onwards.

    'Surged significantly' provides a stronger lexical choice.

  • RevisedVisitor numbers to the lake soared, peaking in 2002.

    'Soared' and 'peaking' are more vivid and precise lexical choices.

Task achievement

Band 8.0/ 9

The essay addresses the task effectively, summarizing the main trends and providing relevant data. It could include more detailed comparisons.

Suggestions

  • Include more specific data comparisons.
  • Ensure all key trends are highlighted.

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