Milk production in four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #7, band 8.5
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The table this answer describes
| 1990 | 2000 | 2010 | |
|---|---|---|---|
| Netherlands | 11,262,000 | 11,155,000 | 11,466,000 |
| Australia | 11,246,000 | 11,105,000 | 9,165,000 |
| Tanzania | 87,000 | 142,000 | 155,000 |
| Guatemala | 26,000 | 55,000 | 84,000 |
Academic Task 1195 words
The table shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.
The table compares annual milk production in four different countries from 1990 to 2010.
Overall, the amount of milk produced in most countries showed an upward trend, except for Australia, where there was a slight decline over the 20-year period. Although milk production levels changed in all countries, their rankings remained the same throughout the period.
In detail, Tanzania and Guatemala had the lowest milk production at the beginning of the period, with 87,000 liters and 26,000 liters, respectively, in 1990. Similarly, Guatemala's production increased from 26,000 liters in 1990 to 55,000 liters in 2000, and further to 84,000 liters by 2010.
Lexical resource
RevisedHowever, both countries experienced significant increases over the next two decades.
Substitutes a more impactful adjective to improve lexical resource.
Grammar & accuracy
RevisedIn Tanzania, production rose to 142,000 liters by 2000, peaking at 155,000 liters in 2010.
Uses a participial phrase for variety in sentence structure.
The Netherlands started with 11,262,000 liters in 1990, saw a slight dip to 11,155,000 liters in 2000, but rebounded to 11,466,000 liters by 2010, making it the top producer. On the other hand, Australia’s production declined steadily, dropping from 11,246,000 liters in 1990 to 1,105,000 liters in 2000, and further to 916,000 liters by 2010.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedConversely, the Netherlands and Australia were the largest milk producers.
Strengthens the contrast with a more appropriate transition word.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
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Coherence & cohesion
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay is well-organized with a clear overview and detailed comparisons. Transitions between ideas are smooth and logical.
Suggestions
- Ensure consistent use of linking words.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedOverall, the amount of milk produced in most countries showed an upward trend; however, Australia experienced a decline.
Improves cohesion by using a semicolon to connect related ideas.
RevisedSpecifically, Tanzania and Guatemala had the lowest milk production at the beginning of the period.
Enhances clarity by using a more precise transition word.
RevisedConversely, the Netherlands and Australia were the largest milk producers.
Strengthens the contrast with a more appropriate transition word.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 9.0/ 9
The essay demonstrates a wide range of grammatical structures with high accuracy.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedTheir rankings remained unchanged throughout the period.
Uses a more precise verb form to convey the same idea.
RevisedIn Tanzania, production rose to 142,000 liters by 2000, peaking at 155,000 liters in 2010.
Uses a participial phrase for variety in sentence structure.
RevisedConversely, Australia’s production steadily declined.
Reorders adverb placement for emphasis.
Lexical resource
Band 8.0/ 9
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary accurately to convey precise meanings.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe table illustrates the annual milk production across four different countries.
Uses a more descriptive verb to enhance lexical variety.
RevisedHowever, both countries experienced significant increases over the next two decades.
Substitutes a more impactful adjective to improve lexical resource.
RevisedAustralia's production consistently declined.
Replaces 'steadily' with 'consistently' for more precise meaning.
Task achievement
Band 9.0/ 9
The essay effectively addresses all parts of the task with a clear overview and detailed comparisons.
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