Milk production in four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #8, band 7.0

The table shows how much milk was produced on a yearly basis in four different nations in three distinct years: 1990, 2000 and 2010. Units are measured in liters.

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Overall, all countries followed an upward trend with the exception of Australia, experiencing a decline. Notably, Netherlands consistently dominated over other countries in terms of annual milk production despite witnessing a significant fall in 2000, whereas the amount of milk produced in Guatemala was the lowest in those three decades.

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   RevisedOverall, while most countries showed an upward trend, Australia experienced a decline.

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With the countries produced relatively high amount of milk, in 1990, 11,262,000 l milk made produced in Netherlands. However, this figure dropped significantly to 11,155,000 l in 2000, before showing an exponential growth to 11,466,000 l in 2010 – the highest figure of this 30-year timeframe. Australia, on the other hand, observed an opposite trend, initially, the amount of milk produced there was relatively high, at 111,246,000 l. From that point on, the scale of milk production in this country recorded continuous decrease and fell to 9,165,000 l in 2010.

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   RevisedIn 1990, the Netherlands produced a relatively high amount of milk, 11,262,000 liters.

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   RevisedAustralia, on the other hand, showed an opposite trend. Initially, it produced a relatively high amount of milk, 11,246,000 liters.

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   RevisedFrom that point on, milk production in Australia continuously decreased, falling to 9,165,000 liters in 2010.

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Moving onto nations which did not manufacture much milk, in 1990, Tanzania manufactured 87,000 l milk, and the quantity of milk made increased noticeably to 1,155,000 l in the third decade. A similar trend was shown by Guatemala where the scale of milk manufacturing was quite low in comparison to those three countries with 26,000 l for 2000. Although, the figure for Guatemala experienced almost two-fold increase, 55,000 l in 2000, and continued to rise until reaching 84,000 l in 2010, it remained as the smallest producer.

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   RevisedIn 1990, Tanzania produced 87,000 liters of milk, and this increased noticeably to 1,155,000 liters by 2010.

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   RevisedAlthough Guatemala's production nearly doubled to 55,000 liters in 2000 and continued to rise to 84,000 liters in 2010, it remained the smallest producer.

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