Milk production in four countries: IELTS Task 1 answer #9, band 6.5
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146 words. Marked by Axiom on 22 April 2025. Estimated by AI. It isn’t an official IELTS score.
The table this answer describes
| 1990 | 2000 | 2010 | |
|---|---|---|---|
| Netherlands | 11,262,000 | 11,155,000 | 11,466,000 |
| Australia | 11,246,000 | 11,105,000 | 9,165,000 |
| Tanzania | 87,000 | 142,000 | 155,000 |
| Guatemala | 26,000 | 55,000 | 84,000 |
Academic Task 1146 words
The table shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
The given table illustrates how much milk is produced yearly by four countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the production of Netherlands was the highest of all countries. While Guatemala shows the least amount of manufacturing in four countries.
Even though it declined slightly by the quantity of 11.155.000 later 10 years, yet it peaked to the amount of 11.466.000 in 2010.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedIn 1990, the Netherlands produced 11,262,000 litres of milk.
The sentence should be revised to include the definite article 'the' and to express the idea more clearly.
However, this quantity went down marginally 11.105.000 in 2000 and 9.165.000 in 2010 year.
Lexical resource
RevisedAustralia was the second highest producer, with 11,246,000 litres of milk produced in 1990.
The word 'opponent' is not appropriate in this context and should be replaced with a more suitable term such as 'producer'.
Coherence & cohesion
RevisedOn the other hand, Tanzania produced 87,000 litres of milk in 1990, which rose substantially to 142,000 in 2000.
The sentence should be revised to improve clarity and coherence.
Lexical resource
RevisedAlthough Guatemala had the lowest milk production in 1990, with 26,000 litres produced.
The sentence should be revised to improve clarity and correct grammar. Also, 'lowest' is a more appropriate term than 'least amount' in this context.
Lexical resource
RevisedIt rose to over half a million in 2000 and 84,000 in 2010.
The sentence should be revised to correct the grammar and provide a more precise expression.
Select a highlighted passage to see its suggested revision.
What Axiom wrote for each criterion: why the answer earned its band, and what to work on next.
Coherence & cohesion
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedThe provided table illustrates the annual production of milk in four different countries in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.
The sentence is slightly informal and could be revised to provide a more formal and precise introduction to the topic.
RevisedIn 1990, the Netherlands produced 11,262,000 litres of milk.
The sentence should be revised to include the definite article 'the' and to express the idea more clearly.
RevisedOn the other hand, Tanzania produced 87,000 litres of milk in 1990, which rose substantially to 142,000 in 2000.
The sentence should be revised to improve clarity and coherence.
Grammar & accuracy
Band 6.0/ 9
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some error-free sentences. However, there are several grammatical errors, particularly with the use of articles and prepositions.
Sentence revisions 1
RevisedThe provided table illustrates the annual production of milk in four countries in 1990, 2000, and 2010.
The sentence is slightly informal and could be revised to provide a more formal and precise introduction to the topic.
Lexical resource
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in the use of vocabulary and some of the language is quite basic.
Sentence revisions 3
RevisedAustralia was the second highest producer, with 11,246,000 litres of milk produced in 1990.
The word 'opponent' is not appropriate in this context and should be replaced with a more suitable term such as 'producer'.
RevisedAlthough Guatemala had the lowest milk production in 1990, with 26,000 litres produced.
The sentence should be revised to improve clarity and correct grammar. Also, 'lowest' is a more appropriate term than 'least amount' in this context.
RevisedIt rose to over half a million in 2000 and 84,000 in 2010.
The sentence should be revised to correct the grammar and provide a more precise expression.
Task achievement
Band 7.0/ 9
The essay provides a clear overview of the information and makes appropriate comparisons. However, the essay could be improved by providing more detailed analysis and by making more precise comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide a more detailed analysis of the information, including reasons for the trends and comparisons between the countries.
- Make the comparisons more precise by using a wider range of vocabulary and by providing more detailed explanations.
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